Free novel critiques

AllynCrowe 2018-08-20 15:15:29 UTC #3

I'd love to, let me settle in here for a proper read

AllynCrowe 2018-08-20 15:28:15 UTC #4

It may take a little while, I just heard dinner will be sooner than I thought. But after that I have my train drive, so I should be good to go!

nascentechuva 2018-08-20 15:35:50 UTC #5

Sign me up when you have time~ I'd love a critique. I need a critique, more like. My usual second pair of eyes is busy with her new sister, so I could use the help.

It's 5 chapters long~

I've managed to catch up on some of my other readings, so I'll check out your story too <3

Leon 2018-08-20 15:38:11 UTC #6

Guess I'll share mine, although I already know a good amount of errors, like with punctuation, character development and that it's probably a bit rushed. Either way, I'm waiting for your answer and I hope you like it.

AllynCrowe 2018-08-20 16:18:42 UTC #7

Alright
Which 10 chapters would you like me to review, the first or the last?

Leon 2018-08-20 16:29:56 UTC #8

I'm currently reworking all the chapters, so you could start with the first 4 ones, which are already updated, and then whichever you want.

AllynCrowe 2018-08-20 18:06:56 UTC #9

@NovelistOrange I reviewed your first chapter. The remained of the chapters will probably have smaller reviews that point you towards things you can improve spefically.

IcyMango 2018-08-20 18:19:12 UTC #10

If you're still taking more, I would like one too:grinning:. It has 11 episodes, so the first 10 will be fine. I'm always wanting to improve it, as well as worried about stupid mistakes lol

OrangeHanada 2018-08-20 18:32:38 UTC #11

Okay, thanks a bunch! I'll go ahead and post reviews on yours when I get to them.

AllynCrowe 2018-08-20 18:36:37 UTC #12

Yes, I'm still taking more
It might take a while before I get to them though, there's apparently no wifi on the train

jiemae 2018-08-20 20:34:45 UTC #13

here's mine if ya don't mind ahah there're 15 chapters so subtracting the two letter chapters, the beginning and the latest couple of chapters are what i'm most interested in hearing critiques of.

i'm very interested in your story, looks right up my alley so eventually (once ive caught up with the novels i've already promised to read,,,,, aaahh), i'll get in on the action

AllynCrowe 2018-08-20 20:41:18 UTC #14

Alright! I'll probably get around to it tomorrow. I just had a long train journey behind me, and it's rather late over here so I doubt I'll get to yours soon. But I'll read it like all the others when I've slept

jiemae 2018-08-20 20:47:54 UTC #15

i hope you have a good nights rest

spicy_sweets 2018-08-20 20:56:36 UTC #16

Fucking hell yes

Here ya go:

AllynCrowe 2018-08-20 20:57:07 UTC #17

I am not sure how many chapters that is buddy

spicy_sweets 2018-08-20 20:57:46 UTC #18

had to get the link cx
Oh it's 9 atm

AllynCrowe 2018-08-20 20:59:40 UTC #19

Alright that's fine xD
It's just a bit hard to critique nothing. Even I couldn't do that.
Also on a side note, if you (or anyone else) would like to do so, it'd help me if you could tell me what you think of my story. Doesn't need to be much, but a simple good or bad helps me along too

JustifiedReality 2018-08-20 21:25:05 UTC #20

It is so awesome that you're doing this! It can be so helpful to new writers (like myself, haha).

Thank you in advance!!

arowfox 2018-08-20 23:25:37 UTC #21

Thank you for contributing in such a nice way. I'm an artist and a writer, therefore I would consider this one of the more unique novels, since it's under the "comic" category, but yet, it's still a pure light novel. I just released the first three chapters, thank you in advance!

N1ghtm4r3 2018-08-20 23:44:01 UTC #22

check mine out, i do like to hear what people say