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[efdvorsky]

I'm blushing so much right now from this review

Thank you so, so, so much I'm so glad you liked it!

[Jrej]

Such detailed reviews @Jewe11s ! Very well done.
The topic kind of got lost during the holiday...
But 100 posts is quite impressive!

Just a reminder, next up are:
- Johnny Bullet
- Cosmic Fish
- The Chronicles of Oro

It's a good opportunity to get feedback on your work and discover new series at the same time so don't be shy!

[Jrej]

The offer still stands.
Anyone in for reviews.
I think this is actually an awesome way to discover new stories and artists.
Feel free to jump in.

[donathinfrye]

I've bookmarked this, and am looking forward to taking part in it! It's a great idea. I want to get a just little further into my comic's first chapter before I put it up here for review, though.

[Dozzer]

Hello! I just thought I'd share my series: The Middle Crowd
I've rolled through this thread and see a lot of active posters, which is awesome! That being said, I've just arrived and hope to return the favor when I get the chance!

The Middle Crowd

Please be upfront and blunt! Tell me what works, what doesn't, what could use improvement! I will appreciate any feedback!

[Inspector_Spinda]

Johnny Bullet
The style reminds me a lot of old comics, or newspaper comics, pretty rare and cool to see. Once in a while the character's pose or expression seems a bit stiff. Most of these situations occur when the limbs are drawn facing straight so I recommending trying to find tutorials on foreshortening. Though I notice your more recent pages are looking much better. You're on the right track! The vehicles all seem to be done very well. Clear a good amount of research was involved.

The plot is interesting and the dialogue is fine, but like the art it is occasionally a bit stilted. Sometimes the characters will speak in oddly formal ways. For example, rather than "Hello Jed." maybe try something like "Hey, Jed." or just "Hey", or "Hi". Your story will be made much more interesting with more interesting dialogue. Another example is "It's a trap! Jack, start driving!" could be "It's a trap! Jack, step on it!"

This is just a small nit-pick, but on page 54 and 57, you put hearts on one of the panels, but I don't really think this is necessary. It doesn't really mix well in my opinion with your realistic style. Sorry if this review seems overly harsh. Your art has class and charm in its own way, but if you touch it up, it can become really great. I recommend you look up some of the more recent works of Naoki Urasawa. He's a manga artist sure, but he has a semi-realistic style that I think you can take a bit of influence from.

6.5/10

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Cosmic Fish

I subscribed after a dozen pages. I bet that tells you all you need to know, but I'll elaborate anyways. Your comic oozes charm. The characters are all very lovable right away. I adore their designs, especially Phil's and Gallo's!

I feel that the initial plot of them rescuing the ghost kid is a bit strange especially since it shows up and ends very quickly. There's some conflict and tension throughout, but it ends too fast to make a big impact, especially since the event it's going to be a repeated one.

This is just a nit-pick, but I think the background color would benefit from being blue rather than green since the characters are already yellowish green. Anyways, overall I LOVED this! Definitely will be reading more.

9/10

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The Chronicles of Oro

Not really the type of thing I typically love, but you seem to be doing a pretty good job. The lines are sharp and clean, and your style is very pleasing. I love the gold swirls you used. I'm a big fan of such effects in comics. It's also cool to see you drawn a bit of elven culture (or maybe it's just asian culture) and even make up a language.

There's a good amount humor in this (bear boobs) which is appreciated. Overall, I'm afraid I don't have too much to say about it. The plot seems to be just beginning and so far it seems interesting, but it doesn't particularly grab me.

7.5/10

Next are
- http://tapastic.com/series/Cosmic-Fish
- http://tapastic.com/series/ChroniclesofOro
- http://tapastic.com/series/Mercenary-Inn

[ToonDoctor]

Hello. I just saw this. Pretty cool review. Thanks! Not harsh at all. I agree with your comments!

Am planning on redrawing much of it for the print edition.

Cheers

[Jrej]

Thanks for joining in.
I hope this sparkle gets the "Review fire" going!

[Jrej]

Who's up for reviews?
Give back and you shall receive...

Next up are still:
- http://tapastic.com/series/Cosmic-Fish1
- http://tapastic.com/series/ChroniclesofOro1
- http://tapastic.com/series/Mercenary-Inn1

[TrustyShamrock]

OK HERE GOES. im not great at reviews so sorry if these are sorta confusing

FORST of all Cosmic Fish by @efdvorsky
theres a lotta pages here so i just read the first chapter. but i like it and plan on readin more!
Art: it has a pretty cool page right from the start. i really dig the way ya zoom down from space to a bug on the ground. the drawings are bomb and the way you do panels is really creative. theres actually a lotta clever things you do with panels and i always love seeing that
i think your backround art is really tops. you make the characters stand out against it but they still look like theyre in that area by the lighting and colors ya use. i do think some panels look like they have more work put into it than others tho. but i wouldnt notice if i wasnt lookin for it
most of all i reeeally like your character/creature designs. theyre creative and fun and magical! it makes me wanna know more about them. the faces they make (especially phils) i thinks are really great and have lots of feeling in them. plus the action and timing of everything seems on point
Story: still super creative! i like the world building stuff but it doesnt seem like a forced info dump. its told thru the story which is good. i DO think tho that itd be helpful to know more about what and where the main characters are a liiitle sooner. cuz its a little hard for me to get on board with everythin thats going on when i dont have anythin to go on. i like that theres mystery to it all and i hope that keeps up in the story. but i think a few words of explanation coulda been squeezed in without givin too much away. on the flip side i DO think it was a good call to hint acanthas backstory at the end of the chapter
but besides that their quest is pretty fun. it does a good job of showing the world and stuff in it. and i keep wantin to know whats happenin next. i keep going back and forward on if i like how fast it all went. i think its good as like a intro story. but i also think it seemed a little rushed. i really do like it tho and am totally subbed to it!
also another side note have you ever seen the short flash cartoons called Brackenwood? it was really fun and creative and your world reminds me of it a lot! theyre both pretty different story-wise and stuff but they both have that fun story-book foresty feel to it. you should check it out! i think theyre on youtube

The Chronicles of Oro by @Jewe11s i only did the first chapter for this one too cuz theres lots of pages
ok so that veerrry first page with the music and the character pics. i gotta say i was really into it. i think it was a good song choice and hearin it while lookin at the pics got me really excited to find out what the story is about
Art: in the prologue i think the art style works pretty good but it also looks really plain compared to how much detail ya put into everythin else. i think you could add somethin to it to just pump it up a little bit cuz its the first part of the story that is gunna be seen. but its still not bad! the main MAIN thing i would change about it is just the font. its kinda a ugly front and it especially doesnt go with the myth origin story thing
later on the arts suuuper great. i really dig the backround art. it has a cool sketchy style that makes it stand out. the characters look a liiitle stiff but i like how different they all look from eachother. even the extras
theres a lot of differences between the 2 worlds too. its pretty easy to tell where they are without needin to have captions
Writing: i do really like the origin story thing about the god kings. i mean im always really into myth stuff like that but its still pretty creative
once the story gets started the way that it keeps switchin forward between the 2 worlds is kinda confusing but confusing in a good way. it builds up lots of mystery. im not super into how in the not-earth-world all of their word bubbles have 2 languages going on in them. its looks a bit messy. all the actual talking is pretty great tho. i especially like pretty much anythin lynn has to say cuz the mysteries of the naked bear lady was really funny to me. things started to get really exciting tho once juniper found that secret room and started gettin teleported to the other world. i thought it all looked great and it was cool watchin the 2 worlds finally meet

ok and NOW Mercenary Inn by @Inspector_Spinda
Art: i like the character designs. they got cool clothes and lots of personality. plus i think ya do a good job with drawin emotions and poses. their poses especially are really fun. they dont look stiff at all and work good in action scenes. i dont really like the what youre usin to draw it with tho. is it pencil and colored pencil? i think itd look a lot better if you went over it with ink. its not scanning really great and a lot of it looks a bit messy. it seems like maybe you inked in the word bubbles? ya should try doing that but aaall over the place!
i think you could spend a little more time on yur backrounds too
in the 2nd chapter ya start doing some snazzy things with panels tho and i think thats fun. and theres more work in the backrounds there so i like that. its easier to tell where the characters are that way and it puts more of a mood for the page
Writing: i like your characters personalitys. ya do a good job of showin it in what they say and do. especially eris. she has a lot going on. i like seeing what shes gunna do next. some of the things that happen seem like theres somethin missing tho. its a little fast and choppy in some parts. and between ch. 1 p. 17 and 18 its hard to tell whats going on. is she breakin into a room? and i dunno where she got the letter from all of a sudden. so maybe just slow that down a liiiittle bit more and itd work better! C:
i also like that cyrus isnt great at the beginning so itd be fun to see him get better. the 2nd chapter is lots easier to follow then the first one. the timing between panels is better and theres more scenery shots to tell when theres a scene change
the plot sorta reminds me of fairy tail but with a different twist to it. and i like fairy tail so that works for me! but i cant say a whole ton about the plot cuz im not sure what it is yet besides magical people going on missions

OH KAY so the next reviews are (i think?)
- http://tapastic.com/series/ChroniclesofOro
- http://tapastic.com/series/Mercenary-Inn
- http://tapastic.com/series/robo-hole (mine)

[efdvorsky]

Cosmic Fish

I subscribed after a dozen pages. I bet that tells you all you need to know, but I'll elaborate anyways. Your comic oozes charm. The characters are all very lovable right away. I adore their designs, especially Phil's and Gallo's!

I feel that the initial plot of them rescuing the ghost kid is a bit strange especially since it shows up and ends very quickly. There's some conflict and tension throughout, but it ends too fast to make a big impact, especially since the event it's going to be a repeated one.

Thank you!!! (I hadn't seen this comment before, I've been so busy last month I'm sorry!) I DO agree I had to work on it a little quickly, and if possible i'd add a few more pages in the future, but surprisingly, the idea of the first chapter was to introduce a bit of what happened, but the focus won't be too "monster of the week" kind of thing. Unformed ghosts are mentioned, but the focus is rather the ghosts that are currently stuck in the world. So yeah, it was a quick tour but it will be a little expanded upon later. : D I actually call this chapter the pilot rather than chapter 1, tbh.

This is just a nit-pick, but I think the background color would benefit from being blue rather than green since the characters are already yellowish green. Anyways, overall I LOVED this! Definitely will be reading more.

9/10

Ooh, yeah that makes more sense! I started that comic about a year ago and was/am still figuring out how to properly color. I think that's a really good thing to keep in mind though. I'll definitely do that!

FORST of all Cosmic Fish by @efdvorskytheres a lotta pages here so i just read the first chapter. but i like it and plan on readin more!
Art: it has a pretty cool page right from the start. i really dig the way ya zoom down from space to a bug on the ground. the drawings are bomb and the way you do panels is really creative. theres actually a lotta clever things you do with panels and i always love seeing thati think your backround art is really tops. you make the characters stand out against it but they still look like theyre in that area by the lighting and colors ya use. i do think some panels look like they have more work put into it than others tho. but i wouldnt notice if i wasnt lookin for itmost of all i reeeally like your character/creature designs. theyre creative and fun and magical! it makes me wanna know more about them. the faces they make (especially phils) i thinks are really great and have lots of feeling in them. plus the action and timing of everything seems on point

/)'v'(\ Thank you, I'm really glad you enjoy the designs and all of that, means a lot!

Story: still super creative! i like the world building stuff but it doesnt seem like a forced info dump. its told thru the story which is good. i DO think tho that itd be helpful to know more about what and where the main characters are a liiitle sooner. cuz its a little hard for me to get on board with everythin thats going on when i dont have anythin to go on. i like that theres mystery to it all and i hope that keeps up in the story. but i think a few words of explanation coulda been squeezed in without givin too much away.

-nods- Yeah alright, makes sense! I think I could have hinted she was a ghost pretty early on rather than JUST a troublemaker, I just wasn't sure if it would have come off as too obvious?

on the flip side i DO think it was a good call to hint acanthas backstory at the end of the chapter but besides that their quest is pretty fun. it does a good job of showing the world and stuff in it. and i keep wantin to know whats happenin next. i keep going back and forward on if i like how fast it all went. i think its good as like a intro story. but i also think it seemed a little rushed. i really do like it tho and am totally subbed to it!

Ooh! Thanks a lot! Yeah I'm sorry if it was a little rushed. Hopefully Chapter 2's pacing is a little slower--but not too slow. But yes, there's more of the comic vibe by this chapter than the first.

also another side note have you ever seen the short flash cartoons called Brackenwood? it was really fun and creative and your world reminds me of it a lot! theyre both pretty different story-wise and stuff but they both have that fun story-book foresty feel to it. you should check it out! i think theyre on youtube

I haven't actually!! I'll go check it out, thank you for the recommendation!

[Inspector_Spinda]

Art: i like the character designs. they got cool clothes and lots of personality. plus i think ya do a good job with drawin emotions and poses. their poses especially are really fun. they dont look stiff at all and work good in action scenes. i dont really like the what youre usin to draw it with tho. is it pencil and colored pencil? i think itd look a lot better if you went over it with ink. its not scanning really great and a lot of it looks a bit messy. it seems like maybe you inked in the word bubbles? ya should try doing that but aaall over the place! i think you could spend a little more time on yur backrounds tooin the 2nd chapter ya start doing some snazzy things with panels tho and i think thats fun. and theres more work in the backrounds there so i like that. its easier to tell where the characters are that way and it puts more of a mood for the pageWriting: i like your characters personalitys. ya do a good job of showin it in what they say and do. especially eris. she has a lot going on. i like seeing what shes gunna do next. some of the things that happen seem like theres somethin missing tho. its a little fast and choppy in some parts. and between ch. 1 p. 17 and 18 its hard to tell whats going on. is she breakin into a room? and i dunno where she got the letter from all of a sudden. so maybe just slow that down a liiiittle bit more and itd work better! C:i also like that cyrus isnt great at the beginning so itd be fun to see him get better. the 2nd chapter is lots easier to follow then the first one. the timing between panels is better and theres more scenery shots to tell when theres a scene changethe plot sorta reminds me of fairy tail but with a different twist to it. and i like fairy tail so that works for me! but i cant say a whole ton about the plot cuz im not sure what it is yet besides magical people going on missions

Thanks for you review
The letter from the end of the first chapter is the same Cyrus gave her at the beginning and she is rereading it because she is upset. Basically the Tower of Magic dumped a amateur mage on her hands. I probably shouldn't planned it more thoroughly so it would make more sense, but live and learn i guess

[Jewe11s]

Hey! Your points seem to match up with a lot of other comments I've been getting. I feel like I can narrow down what I need to focus on in the future Thanks for the review!

[Merryweatherey]

Get Your Webcomic Reviewed 2 - Electric Boogaloo!

New Thread, since the old one got a bit too crowded with posts.

[Jrej]

Thanks for keeping the fire going. I think reviews are great to discover new series while helping creators progress. I'll definitely check out your new thread! Make sure links of series to review are clearly stated every time. It got a bit confusing in here at some point.
Best of luck to you!

[TrustyShamrock]

ah oh no did i kill the game? XD this is a really handy thread tho so thanks for keepin it alive!

[Koffyhouse]

I have never actually done a review of anything before but i can try and write about it!
i know there is another thread but i saw this one first!

The Chronicals of Oro. By @Jewe11s
I didn't read the description of the comic before I jumped into the story. Its starts off with an interesting mythology and very cool artwork. The mythology it built with the story of the two kings was pretty interesting and i feel sets up for a possibly long and interesting story.

It had a strong fantasy feel when i first started reading it, and when it shifted to a modern day setting i was surprised. I started to really like the feeling of the modern story. When the hidden room was discoverd it kind of confused me but it was cool when i realized it was going to be a "fish out of water" kind of story which i have always been a fan of like the original digimon series.

The artwork is awesome. The character designs are well done and easy to recognize. I love how it looks like there was an entire elven language written and placed under the dialog, i feel like if i went back and reread all of it i could figure out what they were saying when it wasn't translated. Over all it is interesting so far and i am excited to read more! 8/10

Mercenary inn. By @Inspector_Spinda
Once more i didn't read the comics description before jumping in to this story. It seemed pretty straight forward when i started reading. Thing things got a little confusing. The pace of the story was very spastic and i got very confused very quickly. Some of the story elements were random and weren't explained before it just moved on.

The art like the story was all over the place. It isn't bad but i could be worked on more before being put up. The action scenes are a strong part of the comic and there is a lot of potential for the comic as a whole. If the story slowed down and stretched out the pages it would be a lot better i might check it out again later on in the future.
5/10

Robo-hole by @TrustyShamrock

Finally i went into this the same way i went into the others, blind. It opened very hypothetical and interesting talking about space and the universe or multiverse. the main character is a funny social outcast who hates everyone, who i can identify with. The crashing of the naked kid was funny and unexpected as was the fact he could turn robot himself even with rocks. the antagonistic girl is perfectly annoying, but what i am really interested in is the mom who told her son that they were a pirate only family, that's what i want to know more about!

The main character has a very interesting and random name and a very basic but identifiable design. the dots on the space boy are interesting part of his design, and everyone has a well flesh out personality. The art is well done and very consistent. I enjoy the humor and the writing and am looking forward to reading more!
7/10

Next three if anyone continues this is
- http://tapastic.com/series/Mercenary-Inn
- http://tapastic.com/series/robo-hole
- https://tapastic.com/series/Wild-Magic (mine)

[Merryweatherey]

Thanks for your participation! Please go to the new thread, and participate there, so we can have a clean start!

[Koffyhouse]

I was just about to!