I feel like the sheer number of people submitting will make it pretty difficult to get through all of the stuff, but, y'know, no reason not to try, I s'ppose:
For the record, I checked the first part of your comic out. I don't have a webtoon account, so I don't think I can hand out ratings or comments, so I'll just leave some general comments here:
Overall, I really liked it! The art was good, I like the style, and it was overall always clear what was going on. The pacing was also pretty well-handled. The party getting killed off got pretty nice and subtle development while they were around, and I thought that was pretty cool. I do have some things I wanna draw your attention to, though:
- I remember there being an awkward phrasing like: "Who could have thought the odds" is usually just "What were the odds", I'm pretty sure.
- I would've changed the color of the hood for either Archold or the new girl, simply because both of them being green kind of makes their hoods less distinct and identifiable, especially in the first scene.
- It's a bit unclear who' screaming Erin's name when the new girl rushes back to camp. I'm assuming it's Rebelia right before or as she's being torn up, but it's hard to know for sure.
- I also found that the panel where the new girl kills(?) Archold is a bit unclear in terms of what happens. Did she slice him? Did he bite her? It was a bit fuzzy.
Beyond that, though, it's definitely engaging to get the reader to keep on reading. As I went back to see if there's any other thing of note, I actually just went off and read the second chapter. Overall, I like this! The pacing is pretty great, too, overall, which is especially hard to judge in comics, so props there, too.