Your style is very unique and you're clearly a good artist. However, your writing skills could use some brushing up. Each piece of text should be clear and concise. When you write your script, read each line and ask yourself if your reader - who knows much less about the story than you do - would understand what's happening at only a short glance. At the same time, keep text somewhat brief (easier for the reader to process). As others have said, the text style is also a bit underwhelming. The light blue colour seems relevant to the story, so if black text doesn't suit your comic, try making the blue a bit darker. This will make the read smoother. Also, make the text slightly bigger, and change it to a more mainstream comic/manga font. My favourite font is Anime Ace from dafont.com but that's just a preference. Finally, if you haven't already, try to share your comic with others. Post it on comic forums, social media, share it with friends (if you're comfortable doing that), etc, you could even reach out to your favourite comic artists and request a shoutout. Hope it works! Looks like an interesting story.
