In the first line, you don't have to say her father's office. Saying his office would be enough as we already know she's talking to her father.
In the second paragraph you moved tenses like in the blurb. I won't comment on tense changes after this one since it will be repetitive but I recommend you look out for those changes. Also, I don't think you need to describe her right now, it takes away from her anger.
I feel nothing from "You don't love me. I hate you!" I would recommend adding in her emotions and/or some gestures to drive home the point.
"...that fell from his eyes"
I think you should specify that it's her father, unlike in the previous example.
"...exclaims Lin Ai."
Why does she need to exclaim here? It's not a emotionally high part. Instead of this, I would have liked to see something trace of her earlier anger since she was furious just a moment ago.
"With her hands, Lin smacks her cheeks."
You don't need to specify that she used her hands here, it's the only thing she can use to smack her cheeks.
"...Lin taps on the door."
How can the person inside hear her knocking? Nightclubs are really loud as far as I know. You should specify that the noise was lesser in this part of the club.
"almost shouting"
Whoa, that was sudden. Nothing prompted this sudden change in volume.
"while throwing food at him"
Where did she get the food from? She's not at the table anymore, right?
"Done drinking..."
I think you should linger a bit more in this part. It was a good place for her to wallow in her emotions.
"Hitting everything in her way"
For example? Does she hit people too or just objects? Even if it's just objects, there should be an argument with the workers there and she should be thrown out of the club for her behavior.
"A car is coming straight towards her"
She should be able to hear the car even if she can't see it. You need to specify that she can't hear it or maybe she does but doesn't care about getting hit.
I felt nothing from the accident. More details, please.
"I have given up on love a long time ago"
That doesn't sound like someone who died after getting heartbroken and drunk and dying because of it.
The talk with the cupid was difficult to understand and get into, maybe go over that part once more to smooth the conversation.
And that's all. I hope my feedback helps you.