I will give you my first opinion about your comic/novel (CLOSED FOR NOW)

Kuma 2021-06-12 14:51:48 UTC #47

I'm doing just the first one.

I feel like I'm not the target audience, but I'll do my best.

The cover looks pretty cool, my first thought about "Purple Shades of Blood" was that the story might involve royalty or nobility, as purple is usually associated with those groups.

The description didn't give any evidence to my theory and I felt like it was a bit vague. The only hook I see is finding out why is there Purple Blood. (Unless the one bleeding is a diehard Prince fan)

I'm more on the "wordier" side of the writing spectrum, but I like your writing style, is easy to follow.

Kuma 2021-06-12 14:56:33 UTC #48

I'm doing just the first one.

The cover is kind of generic, not much to comment on or criticize about. It's serviceable for the story but doesn't have anything that pops out.

The description is also generic, I feel like you could change the name of the main character and it could work for a thousand other stories.

The art is solid but unremarkable, the characters clash a little bit too much with the traced backgrounds, you should try to make both a bit more cohesive.

chestnutriceeee 2021-06-12 14:58:11 UTC #49

Thank you for your feedback!

I have received mixed reviews about the dialogue tags so I am currently considering whether I should keep them or not.

Thanks for your opinion on the description too. I will be changing it sometime soon to make it fit more with the vibe of the story.

Kuma 2021-06-12 15:05:46 UTC #50

"Ravished with hunger, the world was preparing the devouring of the world."

The whole description is a bit rambling and cryptic. I had to read it multiple times to get an idea of the story.

The art is pretty good, you might want to invest in getting a font that makes more sense with the story.

You have a bunch of grammar mistakes here and there, you might wanna do a check-up.

Kuma 2021-06-12 15:11:59 UTC #51

The cover looks to be traced from other work. I'm always against tracing, you should try to invest in getting proper art. The font used for the title sells me a wacky fun world, but the description kinda goes against that impression.

The description is okay, nothing revolutionary, no notable hooks.

When it comes to writing I don't know why you use FULL CAPS for words. There are better ways to attract attention without going full caps, you never go FULL CAPS.

BarBarKetrab 2021-06-12 15:37:48 UTC #52

I would appreciate some feedback for my story, if you have the time.

Stargazer31 2021-06-12 16:04:33 UTC #53

I'd love some feedback!

malsuroor 2021-06-12 16:13:38 UTC #54

Hi!

so far I've been doing yonkuma, and have the first chapter of a my graphic novel up;

this is my yonkuma:

not sure where i wanna end to make a contemplation eventually

this is the first chapter, second will be up soon, once am done with some contest entries for manga and all;

thank you

Fedriz_Marini 2021-06-12 16:20:28 UTC #55

I'll do a leap of faith and attempt this, so:

Enjoy your stay, Have a nice day!

WistyWrites 2021-06-12 16:32:45 UTC #56

I’m really interested in what you have to say!

Aleksei 2021-06-12 16:43:06 UTC #57

Yes, of course!
Here is my piece. Feel free to speak your mind openly.

tamapochi 2021-06-12 17:04:10 UTC #58

Thank you for the feedback! I've checked through my first chapters and corrected some grammar mistakes I made. I've also changed up my novel's description! Hope this one is more understandable. As for the font... I'm not very good with typesetting so I'll stick with it for now Thank you for your opinion though, it's greatly appreciated!

Kuma 2021-06-12 17:07:41 UTC #59

The cover has a lot of personality and pops up. The anatomy could be better, but the style is there, just needs a bit of polishing. The characters are recognizable, the dialogue is snappy and the description works. The main issue is the inconsistency of the art, but apart from that, you have an interesting style of narrative. I love you took your time in the first chapter to create an atmosphere.

BarBarKetrab 2021-06-12 17:12:51 UTC #60

Thanks for the feedback. I'll try to work on everything that needs improving.

Kuma 2021-06-12 17:14:09 UTC #61

The art is what it is, I feel like the description sells a more action packed story and the art gives itself more to comedy hijinks.

Panelling feels a bit rough, you could get more mileage by having gutters between each pannel or using a webtoon esque format with the panels split apart, allowing them to have more individual impact and avoid blending them together. Plus the lines around the panels being so rough give the comic a feeling of being unpolished and messy. I checked the later chapters and you improved a bit, but there is a lot of room to improve the panelling.

Kuma 2021-06-12 17:19:39 UTC #62

I'm just doing the first

Is a biographical 4-koma so there aren't many comments about the concept or the description, it's what's on the text.

I find it jarring the use of Japanese words so often, people who aren't in the know won't get it half of the time. Some of your jokes fall flat, not because they're bad, but because they've been really overused. Writers talking about how hard being a writer is almost as old as time.

The art is serviceable for the concept, nothing groundbreaking.

Stargazer31 2021-06-12 17:20:27 UTC #63

Thank you for the feedback!

joshdayomi 2021-06-12 17:23:04 UTC #64

https://tapas.io/series/So-Childish

I await to hear your critique/opinion

Kuma 2021-06-12 17:25:08 UTC #65

I think the description could be a bit less general and more focused on something. It doesn't give me a hook or a point of interest.

The art is top tier, among everyone on this thread, to my opinion, you have the best art.

I loved the narrative device of the child reading a book, is tried and through, but still works and you make it work perfectly. Kudos to you and your artist.

Kuma 2021-06-12 17:29:57 UTC #66

I feel the description is a bit too vague, you introduce a concept but don't give any explanations about it.

The cover could use some work, there are many really cool free fonts you can find online to improve it for starters. And consider saving to get an artist to do your cover.

I don't know if the village is under siege.

Joking aside, if this was the first thing I read in a book I opened a bookstore, I wouldn't continue, because it feels like the information would keep being repeated.