I will give you my first opinion about your comic/novel (CLOSED FOR NOW)

[chestnutriceeee]

Thank you for your feedback!

I have received mixed reviews about the dialogue tags so I am currently considering whether I should keep them or not.

Thanks for your opinion on the description too. I will be changing it sometime soon to make it fit more with the vibe of the story.

[Kuma]

"Ravished with hunger, the world was preparing the devouring of the world."

The whole description is a bit rambling and cryptic. I had to read it multiple times to get an idea of the story.

The art is pretty good, you might want to invest in getting a font that makes more sense with the story.

You have a bunch of grammar mistakes here and there, you might wanna do a check-up.

[Kuma]

The cover looks to be traced from other work. I'm always against tracing, you should try to invest in getting proper art. The font used for the title sells me a wacky fun world, but the description kinda goes against that impression.

The description is okay, nothing revolutionary, no notable hooks.

When it comes to writing I don't know why you use FULL CAPS for words. There are better ways to attract attention without going full caps, you never go FULL CAPS.

[BarBarKetrab]

I would appreciate some feedback for my story, if you have the time.

Offshoot Petals | Tapas

[Stargazer31]

I'd love some feedback!

Realmwalker | Tapas

[malsuroor]

Hi!

so far I've been doing yonkuma, and have the first chapter of a my graphic novel up;

this is my yonkuma:

Daily Life - Struggles of a Creative | Tapas

not sure where i wanna end to make a contemplation eventually

this is the first chapter, second will be up soon, once am done with some contest entries for manga and all;

Between 2 Sisters | Tapas

thank you

[Fedriz_Marini]

I'll do a leap of faith and attempt this, so:

Stories from the Golden Garden | Tapas

Enjoy your stay, Have a nice day!

[WistyWrites]

The Beasts of the Woods | Tapas

I’m really interested in what you have to say!

[Aleksei]

Yes, of course!
Here is my piece. Feel free to speak your mind openly.

I Want For Something More | Tapas

[tamapochi]

Thank you for the feedback! I've checked through my first chapters and corrected some grammar mistakes I made. I've also changed up my novel's description! Hope this one is more understandable. As for the font... I'm not very good with typesetting so I'll stick with it for now Thank you for your opinion though, it's greatly appreciated!

[Kuma]

The cover has a lot of personality and pops up. The anatomy could be better, but the style is there, just needs a bit of polishing. The characters are recognizable, the dialogue is snappy and the description works. The main issue is the inconsistency of the art, but apart from that, you have an interesting style of narrative. I love you took your time in the first chapter to create an atmosphere.

[BarBarKetrab]

Thanks for the feedback. I'll try to work on everything that needs improving.

[Kuma]

The art is what it is, I feel like the description sells a more action packed story and the art gives itself more to comedy hijinks.

Panelling feels a bit rough, you could get more mileage by having gutters between each pannel or using a webtoon esque format with the panels split apart, allowing them to have more individual impact and avoid blending them together. Plus the lines around the panels being so rough give the comic a feeling of being unpolished and messy. I checked the later chapters and you improved a bit, but there is a lot of room to improve the panelling.

[Kuma]

I'm just doing the first

Is a biographical 4-koma so there aren't many comments about the concept or the description, it's what's on the text.

I find it jarring the use of Japanese words so often, people who aren't in the know won't get it half of the time. Some of your jokes fall flat, not because they're bad, but because they've been really overused. Writers talking about how hard being a writer is almost as old as time.

The art is serviceable for the concept, nothing groundbreaking.

[Stargazer31]

Thank you for the feedback!

[joshdayomi]

https://tapas.io/series/So-Childish

I await to hear your critique/opinion

[Kuma]

I think the description could be a bit less general and more focused on something. It doesn't give me a hook or a point of interest.

The art is top tier, among everyone on this thread, to my opinion, you have the best art.

I loved the narrative device of the child reading a book, is tried and through, but still works and you make it work perfectly. Kudos to you and your artist.

[Kuma]

I feel the description is a bit too vague, you introduce a concept but don't give any explanations about it.

The cover could use some work, there are many really cool free fonts you can find online to improve it for starters. And consider saving to get an artist to do your cover.

I don't know if the village is under siege.

Joking aside, if this was the first thing I read in a book I opened a bookstore, I wouldn't continue, because it feels like the information would keep being repeated.

[Kuma]

First, put your links under the description, not as the first line.

The description has a lot of issues, like sentences that are too long and have to many commas and a couple of grammar mistakes.

The art is good, maybe a bit flat, could use half tones or more shading.

Comic is a visual medium and is better to show, rather than just tell. We learn a lot about Cody on the first pages, but everything is told to us, we don't see it. Talking to himself is the easiest, and dare I say cheapest, way to dunk exposition. You could have used a friend at the very least to make it sound more natural, show him stepping on puddles, visually giving us cues both to his lack of computer and his bad luck.

[Koneko-chan-hai]

Thank you for the feedback! The link is there because of the dashboard link, but to be fair, I haven't posted much on deviantArt lately so it's only useless. And thank you for checking it out even if the concept is not your favorite! Hopefully I will get better at storytelling by showing more rather than telling.