I will give you my first opinion about your comic/novel (CLOSED FOR NOW)

sevenstarsofeightIam 2021-06-12 18:26:08 UTC #71

Murmurations of the mind,
When thoughts coalesce,
Dark emotions shimmering like a fluid heart.

Kuma 2021-06-12 18:29:49 UTC #72

I'm also non-native, so I understand, keep up the good work

Happyful 2021-06-12 18:34:21 UTC #73

please review mine as well. the first page is the cover art. cheers!

Kuma 2021-06-12 18:36:04 UTC #74

Thank you so much for the feedback, I did some modifications to the description

Bellise 2021-06-12 18:38:18 UTC #75

Here is my comics
Comics;
Genre: Action, Drama

Genre: Action, Drama

Genre: Action, Horror

Genre:Action, Drama

Hope you like it..

thecrystalrook 2021-06-12 18:38:56 UTC #76

go for iiiiit

Jwebtoons 2021-06-12 18:39:36 UTC #77

A battle shonen novel based on other battle shonen stories.

Tailzkip 2021-06-12 18:40:23 UTC #78

Hello. My series is a long runner at this point. But I have always had problems when it comes to a description or a thumbnail image lol. I'm never sure what works, so some feedback would be helpful : )

Fedriz_Marini 2021-06-12 19:32:02 UTC #79

Thanks a lot for the feedback, Although, I mostly have some difficulties with the Description to be honest, as I don't know how to put down in a few words the premise, originally it was longer and more specific on the various stories, but after a while, it might have been a drawback, so I wanted to compact it by also referencing the "Introduction" chapter, and yet it appears it's not working even in this way... I had no idea at all, I always had difficulty with a synopsis (Mostly, trying to explain a lot with just a few words, I tend to be over descriptive in the scripts).

EDIT: Ok, It is shorter than the last one, but I guess this one is more specific and less general, while also not giving away too much.

ML_Peregrine 2021-06-12 19:35:28 UTC #80

Ah, I'm glad I could help! I always worry that I'm being too harsh, but the teacher in me wants to help as much as I can.

Kuma 2021-06-12 19:36:12 UTC #81

Apart from working on videogames I practice Pro-Wrestling, so I'm acustomed to getting hit really hard, I have thick skin.

LXndra 2021-06-12 23:10:58 UTC #82

yea i totally understand the issue with the background as im only doing everything myself and backgrounds take a long time to do. as for the story it will take a bit longer to get the full story going as its just the beginning. its slow. but i feel after a few more episodes the story will go better. as for the names they're names i gave them with i was a teen and only changed the last names. mind you i did originally create this story when i was 16 sooooo as of now about....19 years ago. lots of things have changed since. but lets see where it goes. but totally appreciate the feed back. <3

Kuma 2021-06-12 23:34:59 UTC #83

I think you misunderstood the naming part. I meant to say that your description is a tad generic, to the point that if I replaced Janelle's name with any other name, it could easily fit other stories. The issue isn't the name, but the content of the description.

LXndra 2021-06-13 00:21:22 UTC #84

ah ok i get you. the description i had a bit of an issue with it myself. i know i have to re-do it as you said, generic. but i didnt want to give the whole plot away with it.

Kuma 2021-06-13 00:29:46 UTC #85

Is a matter of giving a hook, of telling the audience what makes your work different from others

LXndra 2021-06-13 01:29:48 UTC #86

very true. i'll work on it. it is different here on tapas than webtoons as i have over 10.5k views and 250 subs. but guess its a different audience. i'll just work harder on it. just wish i had a team. maybe one person to work on the background.

Kuma 2021-06-13 01:35:24 UTC #87

You could hire artists to help.

LXndra 2021-06-13 02:48:59 UTC #88

cant afford it honestly

sandwhichkarp 2021-06-13 03:12:48 UTC #89

Please review mine as well. This is my first time writing a novel so any feedback is appreciated.

ZenexGraze 2021-06-13 13:00:07 UTC #91

Thank you for your review. Also, I apologize for my rookie mistakes. I am just a beginner in this world of amazing works. I will take care of the FULL CAPS. About the cover, I have already started making another one. I hope that you will keep supporting me