Echos of Calamity, Book 1 Divergence
Hi, thanks for sharing your story! I really liked it, I'm a sucker for science fiction!
I'm liking how fast-paced and urgent everything feels. The explanation of the mission and the objective were simple and not long-winded like I've seen some other stories do. The sense of dread and the feeling that something went horribly wrong at Colony Alpha is very palpable. The dialogue is believable and you did a great job setting up the mystery of what happened.
What I'm struggling with is the lack of description of the environment and the characters. So far I have no idea what these characters are wearing (space suits, military uniforms, dresses??) or what the buildings in the colony look like (tall, short, round, square??). If you added some descriptions about those things I think it would really help to tie everything together. In science fiction it is important to help your reader get grounded in the story quickly so they feel more invested.
That's all I have for you, hope it helps! Thank you again for sharing!