The Lonely Knight And His Light
Hi there! Thank you for sharing!
I really liked the sense of being lost that Lucius is feeling, I think you conveyed that pretty well. The last sentence where he says the person approaching him will be his first victim was interesting and made me wonder what kind of morals he has, if he is a villain or not.
The thing that kind of confused me was your prologue. It read more like a summary or what you would read on the back of a book to entice you to read it. A prologue should act more like a tiny taste of the actual story, or maybe a scene that takes place before the actual story begins. I think if you edit that to read more like a prologue instead of a summary it might help.
That's all I got for you, thanks again for sharing!