I would like some feedback on my comic, plz

[comixbubbles]

I have made a new comic. I would like some feeedback and your thoughts. It is a dark parody on superheroes. Filled with dark humor. I hope you enjoy.

Mother of Villainy and a delusional teenage girl :: page 2 | Tapas

[shiftingverses]

The first thing I would say is that while you have a fun and loose style, it's a little hard to follow the action from moment to moment. There's only a few pages here, but you could do well to set up more breathing room between jokes (some of which are actually pretty funny!) and use more establishing shots so that the reader has a clearer idea of who the characters are, and most importantly, where they are in relation to each other.

On a technical note, I'd recommend scanning in your pages and doing the speech bubbles and lettering after, as the handwritten style is hard to read and you often run out of space in your balloons.

Hope this helps!

[comixbubbles]

Thx u so much for the feedback! I will keep this in mind. I will try to use more establishing shots and more breathing room, but I currently don't have access to a scanner. Any advice?

[Rhonder]

I currently don't have access to a scanner. Any advice?

Regarding this part, it's totally possible to do lettering and ballooning traditionally, that's how it used to be done, after all~ Some tips for that:

• I can't exactly tell with your balloons, but if you're not already: be sure to write the words first and then draw the balloon after. This way you can always be sure to give the words enough breathing room in the bubble :] right now they are a little smushed.
• For writing the actual letters, use a ruler to draw out some parallel guidelines to draw in, this will help keep the letters a consistent sizes and straight.
• Be careful when using color in your word bubbles to make sure they're still legible. For example, on the 2nd upload, the panel where it says "Okay, Ruby. I get it! Quite whining!" the red that's colored on top of the letters makes them kind of hard to read, possibly because of the dark-ish word bubble color behind it. On the next panel where it says "Yes we gotta" with the same red, it looks fine because the red stands out well against the yellow.

I think those are the main lettering tips I have. The most important one is the first one though: just make sure you have enough space around the text in the bubble. This thread also has a lot of good tips on the matter: https://forums.tapas.io/t/share-your-nity-gritty-tips-speech-bubbles/18968/19

[TheBryceKrispy]

@shiftingverses, I agree! Love the Art style but Comic Bubbles need to put breathing room in-between jokes. It is a little hard to read, but still is readable though, I don't mind it being hand written.

Overall I would give the series a 4 out of 5 stars. There is definitely is a lot of potential in this series.