I read the whole thing, and here are some of my thoughts:
Cons:
Blaine is plain. I think it would've been better if we saw a scene or two of him before he got stuck on that machine in ep.0, it would also make us cheer for him to get out and return to his old life (even if he got amnesia)
Too much internal thoughts. Especially in ep1, Blaine thought of every step he took.
The action scenes need more work. Try some effects with the camera to make it look better? It is stiff right now. I don't know how to word this critique better, but oh well.
Pros:
The art is good. It is easy to tell whatever is happening.
The characters' interaction are great. Although introducing a bunch of characters without proper introduction could undermine this, depending on how it proceed moving forward.
Character design are good so far.