If you comment on the comics, it'll boost my engagement big time!
I also got a web novel that's super fun to read too
Okay so I read the first 5 episodes and:
- I think the line art should be more clean cause I have trouble understanding what's going on
- I think you should use the text the app gives instead of drawing/writing the text yourself because I can't understand what the characters are saying most of the times
- The panel boxes do get better at page 4 which is good
- I actually do like the "motion"/"lines of action", it looks good. Makes the drawing feel more "alive"
- I like the characters design
- The description looks interesting
Overall u did say its mess cause its more of a practice comic. I would try to make the lines more clean and use the "text" option. This is just my opinion tho.
May I know what app u use to draw?
(I'm sorry for the late reply, I couldn't reply because I had reached the reply limit)
The story it's pretty interesting. I like the plot kinda reminds me of Devils line.
- I think the line art should be "thinner"
- The action scenes are pretty good, easy to understand and they look cool
- I like the way the panel was colored in episode 2 , I think u should try doing more of those
- Maybe try bettering the perspective a lil (I have trouble doing that too lol)
- Annie got my attention out of all the characters
Okay so it's really hard to understand.
Try to use the "text" option in whatever app you using instead of writing it yourself. Try switching brushes, use texture brushes and use thinner brushes for the line art.
The description looks interesting but I didn't understand what was going on in the story
The art style its really cute and the story it's interesting!!
The line art its clean, the text its readable, the art its good and so is the plot.
I think the only thing that caught my attention was the thick line art, I would do it thinner unless that's ur art style.
The art it's truly amazing, it really does remind me of manga. The eye patch guy reminds me of someone, maybe the guy from Mars red. Nothing much to judge, maybe the way the text is placed inside the bubble is kinda off. And the first word in the speech bubble is never capitalized
I made a model for a few backgrounds so I can have a black and white line art so all I would have to do would be coloring, blending, shading and adding those shadows in.
I do hand draw some backgrounds but I'm lazy lol
For example this one took me hours so I ended up being lazy at the coloring part
Ye, English ain't my first language so sometimes I do not look twice. For example I never notice I write "this" instead of "these" till I upload the webtoon and I'm too lazy to change it. (well I'm too lazy to change any grammar mistakes ngl)
You have a good eye for those page transitions
I didn't even notice, thx for pointing that out- I didn't even notice that, I'll come back to those backgrounds and give it some blending/shadows [quote="ItzaMeLuigi, post:17, topic:62712"]
For the artwork, the backgrounds look a bit out of place due to the fact that there aren't any shadows.
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ItzaMeLuigi:there are a few panels where the movement feels "off", but that'll improve as you get better as an artist
Ngl, I'm bad with movements. I laugh every time I see that part. I gotta fix that 
Thx for pointing stuff out. I didn't even notice a few of those things, I was kinda rushing with chapter 1 so I gotta go back to that one to check what I missed. (I did notice how blurry some panels get once uploaded, I gotta see how to fix that)
Imma edit this comment once I read ur story 
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@ItzaMeLuigi
First of all I like the art.
-The story its interesting , futuristic stuff always attracts my attention. (This kinda reminds me of a spring 2021 anime but it's mainly about robots)
-The concept of getting rid of memories it's pretty cool, makes u wonder if erasing a memory will really solve your problems. I subscribed, looking forward to the webtoon.
The text is readable. Is kinda blurry on laptop tho
I like the way the story is told and the panels placement it's good and easy to follow
Memories really do make a person.
(The character from my story finna need some of that "losing memory" machine lol)
Ok, Let's do another leap of faith, Hope you might like it:
GENRE: Sci-fi Fantasy, Drama
From the nights He used to spend by reading tales of "the Dreamers", the young Alfredo Ananda Kasem always longed to be one of them as well, unaware of the Potential that resides in his Echo, that could change the lives of those around him, whose Stories, connected to His, are the KEY to bring changes to the World of Gaia, and lead to its peace once and for all.
LINKS:
https://www.instagram.com/fedriz_marini/
Enjoy your stay, Have a nice day!
Read your comic, I'm pretty bad at giving advice so uh... I'll keep it brief. XD The story seems interesting so far, but not a lot whole lot has been established yet. The art is fine, the characters can be a bit stiff tho so I recommend practicing drawing different poses and such. But ye keep it up homie 
Here's my comic, I'd prefer story advice over anything but you can give other advice as well if you want
thank you for feedback ( ^ v ^
I'm still amateur , I draw by mouse and English is second language ( ; v ;
but I'm trying my best to improve ( > v < )9
You are in luck because I have 2 chapters and the third it's a work in progress lmao.
De hecho hablas español? se ve interesante tu historia :3 ya leí el primer capítulo de hecho haha.
aquí esta mi trabajo haha
Por cierto tomate las cosas con calma, muchas personas quieren que leas su cómic/novela,pero he de decirte que no necesitas hacerlo todo, el hecho de que dejes promocionar aquí muchos otros pueden leer los trabajos de los demás, cuidate :3c
Join me in Heaven is a story that contains Fantasy+ Psychological Horror + Drama elements to it.
"Two lost souls seek the light, but they'll have to choose between the ephemeral light of a campfire or the eternal warmth of their Sun, this will not come without a consequence. This is a story of two friends who realize things have more sides to them, as it looks into their hearts and minds, will they keep believing what they believe at the whatever the cost to keep themselves in this "light"."
Hi! Thank you for the opportunity we just updated our comic and would rly appreciate if you checked it out <3
RIP