@Filthiestboi Love the whale mart pun. I also love the irony of the shady guy in black smoking a cigarette and then turning out to be the owner of the store. Very unexpected. Foreshortening with the violin is good even for such a simple comic. Maybe try line variety. Like thick lines for the outside and small thin lines inside. Experiment with thick and thin. As for hands, hands are very difficult and I suggest you use your own hands for reference, use a wooden hand mannequin, or cover the hands in gloves like Mickey Mouse. Once you have improved on hands, this will save you a lot of time and will improve quality. Your cartoon reminds me of those rubber hose cartoons from the 1920s and 1930s (especially the huge giant guy!) Try looking at few for reference. Rubber hose cartoons are loose like pieces of string, and are simple, which allows for great emotion and expression as well as fluid movements. If you study a few of them, I think it will help give your characters more flowy and expressive movement, as well as allowing you to be more creative. You can be dark and funny at the same time. Here is a video that you can watch for reference: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gZrXkuOEb1o Really great start so far, and I am interested to see where this goes.
@CytricAcid First of all, I like your colors. Very retro vibe. I love Edwin’s design; he looks like an evil Nick Drake and you got the pants just right. There’s nothing bad about your art at all. The flowy lines show the psychedelic era of the 1970s and the pants and legs are thin and curvy. Use curves to your advantage. I know most of your comic so far is black and white, but if you are interested in using color in the future, here is some advice. Sometimes using unusual colors, bright colors, or having a limited color palette works. Pick something that stands out on your character (like hair for example) and change it into a bright, neon color so it’s something that the eyes will look at. Take “Belladonna of Sadness” for example. This anime from the 1970s did bizarre color experimentation that made the cartoon more psychedelic. The main character’s hair stands out the most, so that is often the part that receives the most color. Pinks, purples, yellows, you name it made her stand out with limited color used on her body and skin. Of course, don’t do this on every page but certainly do use bizarre colors from time to time, or use patterns, lines, shapes, and textures to illustrate the vibe of the person (for example, if a person has an aloof personality, triangles and other rigid shapes could be used to reflect their personality). Flowers, water, butterflies, and other nature designs were used in psychedelic animations, posters, and comics of the 1970s. A little bit of imagery can add a lot to the story and puts nostalgia in the atmosphere. Especially in the backgrounds of your comics. The 70s produced a lot of weird ass shit in cartoons so it is okay to be weird. In fact, do be weird. Transform and shapeshift clothes. Use surrealism. Give life to inanimate objects. Give chairs and tables wobbly legs. Whatever weird idea comes into your head, do it and go to town! Seriously! A lot of experimental films were released during this era ‘cos everyone was smoking grass. For club scenes, music scenes, drug scenes, scenes where there is a party atmosphere with a lot of people this is where you can experiment a lot more and use patterns, curves, and colors. Go wild and use your imagination. Robert Crumb and Charles Burns is a great place to look for inspiration. As for pacing and framing, there is nothing you need to change. Pacing is good and it’s clear who’s talking and what’s going on. I really like the characters so far, and it’s funny. Right now, just focus on developing the characters and showing us who they are. Show don’t tell. Once you feel like your audience really knows what your characters are like through their actions or quotes, then you can put them on weird and funny adventures with all sorts of drama. Put the who, what, where, and why, first before you do anything else Good luck and keep doing it!
@IndigoShirtProd I gotta say, I like the textures you have put into the goddesses hair. Most people just do flat color and don’t think too much about texture, but I can tell it’s something you do think about even though it is small. The art style is really cool, and shading is excellent. You have advancement in color, and I feel like one day this would make a really great film! I like how the color control the temperature, like in the ice and fire temples I could feel the heat of the volcano and the icy bars. I like the sharp angles you use. Pacing seems just right. As for the action scenes, have you considered slowing those down? Sometimes it can be a bit confusing on what’s going on and why people are fighting. Show us who is attacking, the cause and the effect. Get up close shots and zoom in for detail. Even use the whole page if you need to, but only for big impacts and huge damage. And if a fist is coming in or a knife is being thrown, you can slow it down for greater effect or speed it to show reality. Also, I would suggest using more geometric shapes! I can see you’re already doing it which is good because those sharp, straight lines really show the personality of your style and make it unique. Have you tried looking at Islamic tile art? I think it would fit a lot with your style as it’s a bunch of tessellating shapes and by connecting those shapes together, you can create forms of trees, icebergs, houses, etc like a Tangram puzzle. Well, that is all I have to say. Good luck!
@migxmeg wow! Your backgrounds are very good! I love the pastleness and how you use mainly shapes to suggest instead of lines. The backgrounds aren’t detailed, but we know that they’re there which is what makes them good. I also like the atmosphere of this one. Looking at your comic makes me want to go there. I also like Elissa. Even the first few panels where we don’t know a lot about who she is, we get the sense that she is a strong female character because she can swim and she is wary around others. Abirami also seems like a cool person. The way you introduced him is funny. I love the way you draw people. The hair blowing in the wind is very realistic and it looks tangible as well as the facial expressions. One day when you are done with your comic, you should definitely consider printing it, or adapting it to the silver screen. I can’t believe why your comic isn’t more popular. It is a very good comic, beautifully drawn, with an interesting story, and I will subscribe!
@Gramkrackerhan I read the first episode, and I was hooked. I did not expect that. I really like the simple art style and a few of these comics even feel personal. You’re a lot like me because even though I write fiction, I still treat my comic like a journal. I don’t have much more to say other than I like it and I have subscribed to it. Keep doing it!
Ok, that was as far as I got this week. Next Friday, I will respond to more people and review more comics.
Happy weekend y'all! ^^