Let's be constructive!

[Monthewall]

I haven't seen a topic about giving each other some critiques, so I made one myself. Keep it constructive and put your own comic down below if you want someone to criticize your work.

Tips:
1. Don't just say something is wrong with another person's masterpiece. Make sure you tell them what it is, and how they can improve.
2. We're here to improve each other, not tear something apart, be nice.
3. If it's not in your genre, or what you would normally read, try it, but don't criticize the choice of genre.

Here's my comic, if you want to criticize it, or check it out.

Genere: fantacy, adventure.

Simulation:Start | Tapas

[Kuma]

Centris | Tapas

I always enjoy gettign feedback. (Mine is a Novel though)

Feedback for yours.

1. You should use a larger resolution, I can barely make out what the text says because its blurry.
2. I feel like you could improve a bit the lay out of your pages, there are some I can't really follow (Combined with the low res makes this even worse)
3. I do like the art style is really unique and different from others.

[Monthewall]

Thank you for your feedback, it's much appreciated to improve.
I looked at your novel, and I love it so far! I like the description and the interaction between Novus and Tiria. However, it was a bit confusing, when one of them would talk after the other in the same paragraph. To avoid confusion, splitting the paragraphs would help.

[Stargazer31]

Realmwalker | Tapas

Feedback:
1. The text is a bit blurry. Maybe try making it larger?
2. I like the art style, even if it's kind of fuzzy in places.

[GGOkumura]

Same as the others.
1. The text and images are quite blurry and sometimes it's really blurry. You could use a higher resolution when drawing (300 - 350dpi) and then when you export it you can lower it a bit if it's excessive on megabytes.
2. Some scenes I can't really tell who's talking. Maybe use a specific color for each character or add a bubble tail.
3. The art is pretty good but again due to the blurriness I can't tell sometimes what's going on. (This is related to the first point)

[Kuma]

Thank, I've been told that, is already fixed in later chapters.

[dsptss78]

I'm definitely down for constructive criticism.

Dan | Tapas

[Oto_Kouda]

I'll hop on this train!

Second Lead Syndrome | Tapas

[Oto_Kouda]

Others have already mentioned the resolution, so I'll give a few different comments instead!

• I like the composition combined with your art style. It gives the comic a really s̷͕͔̓̚u̴̡͉͒r̷̖̹̎r̴͓͐e̸̫̤̾â̷̘ḽ̴̌ feel. It's like if Picasso and Stephen King decided to collab.
• This is a neutral note: I have only the slightest idea of what's going on in the story, but that very curiosity is what keeps me reading. If it weren't for the story summary, I'd probably be a little lost. But!—Once "Chapter 2: Part 3" came, I started understanding the story more.
• The last comment I'll give it that the text/bubbles are a little big. It works when I'm reading it on my PC, but on my phone, some of the bubbles take up a large portion of the screen, taking away from the art.

There's room for improvement, but I see lots of potential too!

[Monthewall]

The story is very intriguing, however, giving Dan too much power, without an equal could be walking along the lines of a Marty Stu.
The art is amazing. I like how you draw the buildings, especially. I couldn't even imagine having to draw line art.

Here's some things I noticed after reading a few chapters:

• Your characters are explaining everything, which gives extra dialogue that could be unnecessary. It does help explain the world, but it's hard to get immersed in the world if they have to explain everything.
• When the characters are just standing, they seem stiff. Something as simple as changing perspectives, facial excretion, or even having the character cross their arms, could help with that.

[AwesomeSoFar]

this one's just 3 pages, so it should be easy to get through!

Goodbye, Rival

Goodbye, Rival | Tapas

[LawrenceSV]

Constructive criticism is always helpful

What remains after | Tapas

[dsptss78]

Thank you so much for critiquing my comic. I will definitely use this information as a way to improve my webcomic.

[Monthewall]

I like the story from what I read so far. The description is wonderful, and I can't wait to read more!

Here are some things I noticed while reading:

1. When you changed perspectives, it was a bit confusing. I recommend changing to the third person, or saying who's point of View your in.
2. I don't see many dialogue tags, which could spruce up your writing.

[SupperYass]

nice

TheMsMs | Tapas

[crowstories]

I'd love some feedback, and am happy to return the favor to anyone who checks out my novel (though it might take me a bit as I'm going to be fairly busy today).

Chaos Dog | Tapas