Hey all.
I'm looking for some feedback on my comic's story outline. Basically it's only in the outline phase and is broken into small 2-4 sentence chunks. There isn't a lot of detail or dialogue as of yet. It's literally just the story arc's skeleton. Word count is 1,705.
I'm preparing to go through and do a second draft, and I'd like to have a good idea of anything that could push the story to be even better. Essentially I want to make sure that there are no huge leaps in logic or that it's too confusing to keep up with.
A bit of info on my series:
It's a sci-fantasy battle shounen.
The story arc outline in question starts at episode 25, which has already been published.
Here's a link to the comic episodes already out:
Now, if any of you are interested in helping me out, I'll PM you a link with the Google Doc of the outline.
And this won't be an ongoing position of beta reader, I just need eyes on this specific story arc outline. Additionally I'd like all critiques and suggestions to be done in the same PM I send the link to.
Thank you all in advance! (Please let me know if my pitch for assistance was too abrupt or demanding.)