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Nov 2018

I like the prologue definitely. :+1:
The one thing which seems a bit strange to me is guy's facial expression on the first picture

The art is definitely stunning, and I adore holographic text you used to narrate the story.

However, I feel like the first sentence was a tad too complicated. It could've been simplified into 'Let our story begin, not at the ending, but before the start of the end'.
Final and ending have the same meaning, so using both of them sounds redundant. Same thing with beginning and start, so I omitted them.

The next thing is that I don't really understand the action sequence in the last few panels.
I see that Calmate fired a shot at something (maybe the door), but then the shot...rebounded?? I just don't understand the part where the laser bullet passed above the couple.

For better understanding, I suggest you 1) show what the bullet hit, and 2) space two separate scenes farther apart.

Good point on that opener for sure.

Calmate is Spanish for calm down and the laser blast will be explained more in the next release. I wanted to put the reader in the middle of action and confusion and looks like I did it =)