New writer wants feedback

karmaaaa 2025-02-03 22:17:08 UTC #1

Hi, I am a new writer and recently started releasing chapters of a BL novel I started to write. I would really like for some feedback and some critique.
My novel is called - Finding my Familiar https://tapas.io/series/Finding-my-Familiar-

justincarbunkle 2025-02-03 23:47:42 UTC #2

Subbed/liked. Will review the first few episodes rn.

If you could do the same for my comic, I'd very much appreciate it.

wolflu66 2025-02-03 23:50:13 UTC #3

I think that paragraphs in novels should have line breaks between them, which makes them easier to read. I'm not skilled in literature, so I cannot provide good advice.

By the way, this is my comic, feel free to take a look when you have time, if you're willing.

justincarbunkle 2025-02-04 00:15:15 UTC #4

Read the first 3. I don't understand what happened to the rabbit familiar between chapters 2 and 3. If he was supposed to fuse Jinx/the dragon and was just there to help form/test their relationship, or you just suddenly dropped him, I couldn't tell what was happening there.

I liked your descriptions of character actions. Jinx had a fun personality. There's potential here, I just don't understand what happened to the rabbit boy you set up.

karmaaaa 2025-02-04 00:32:59 UTC #5

He was just a side character to bring jinx to meet the dragon. He actually gets merged into the dragon zephyr, that's why the dragons appearance changes a bit.
Thank you for reading I'll read yours.

karmaaaa 2025-02-04 00:40:39 UTC #6

Thanks for the feedback
I just subscribed to your comic it's amazing so far

arcaneer99 2025-02-04 04:53:55 UTC #7

Hello

I'll be checking out your story this week.

If you're interested in a Science-Fantasy, I'll leave mine here.

NewAgeComics 2025-02-04 05:37:35 UTC #8

TeDe12 2025-02-07 20:56:52 UTC #9

Hey everyone! I’m new here and just released my isekai novel, Shattered Destiny. It’s a thrilling story, and I’m sure you’ll enjoy it!

doitlikeomar69 2025-09-03 03:13:29 UTC #10

I make multiple stories but Gallantwitch and gallantwitch Eden lie are my mains they tell a story hope people will enjoy

https://tapas.io/series/Gallant-Witch

Sylverixxxxx 2025-09-04 17:50:27 UTC #11

Hello everyone, I would also like a review of my novel if possible. Also please Sub and Like if you liked the content it would mean alot to me :))