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[mastermie001]

Okay bud, listen up.

Your comic cover and synopsis are great. However, something is missing in your comic.
You have a good cover, synopsis, and plot. But you strongly lack in the visually aesthetic part of your comic. In other words, your comic is lacking a good art work.

Now, do not feel down about this. You are a good artist. However, if you really need your work to grow, put in the time and improve the art work of your comic.

I don't want to come off as mean or picky, but this is a common trend I've seen within comics. It's also a reason for me to chose not to make my book, 'The Creator's Bloodline' a comic until I can commission a well detailed artist to do the drawing for me.

In conclusion, please try and improve the drawing of your comic. I know it's hard, but your fans depend on it. Think of it this way, a gold medal never goes to a mediocre or lesser talented athlete because their work/presentation did not meet the bench mark.

In this case, your fans and the future endorsements, fames, fans, and more are all determined by the quality of your work. Now, some people get mad at me when I say this type of things to them. Normally, they would check my tapas story and call me a hypocrite.

However, if you doubt my credibility on this information. I will provide you with a link of the first platform my book was published on. Based on what you see, you can judge for yourself. Tapas is in fact the 4th platform my book was published on.

Here is the link; https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-creator's-bloodline_20272120706877205

Except for what I had mentioned previously, your comic is good.

Good job,
Olisa.

[mastermie001]

Thank you. To be honest, it was actually your subscription notification that brought my attention back to this thread. I've sacrificed my editing time to help review people's works. So, I sometimes burn the midnight candle just so I can be able to keep up.

Now, for your book.

#1) The Cover
The cover of your at work is great. It is not of poor quality, and it looks interesting.

#2) The synopsis
Your synopsis is great, but please space them out! Being clustered together doesn't look professional. It actually makes your comic look like a rookie work, to be honest.

#3) The plot
The plot of your story is good. It's a romantic type story and involves Naomi and how she adapts as a Japanese-American in the Japanese school. It also exemplifies the struggles and the twist and turns in her school and private life.

It also has a fine way of defining the characteristics of your character, Naomi. Happy, funny, and a little bit childish.

#4) The artwork
This kind of art work is really professional. Good job.

Maybe someday, you and a small group of people I'm connecting with can collaborate together on something I've been pondering on for a while now. However, please don't be overly hyped up. My book has to be done before then. Once it's done, I'll try and commission you and the others for something.

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All in all, good work. I love your work, bud.

Have a great day,
Olisa.

[Kaiki]

Thank you very much! The point about the synopsis especially. Good luck on your book! I'm open to hearing about your plans when you are ready to talk about it

[TheBluester]

Thank you for the opportunity to promote! I'll be checking out your works soon!

In the meantime, here's my novel! I'm currently at 20 subs and trying to reach the goal of 25!

Title: The Swallow of Storms
Genre(s): Fantasy, Action, Drama

Synopsis: To this boy whose heart is as unmoving as the forlorn and weary expression on his face. After a night of unprecedented tragedy that unexpectantly leaves him in service to a deity who doesn't go to his sister for free, as he goes through this new world, vengeance and the hopes of reuniting with his family are the only things that keep him going.

Content Warning: Violence and mentions of cannibalism in future chapters!

The Swallow Of Storms | Tapas

[mastermie001]

Your comic is actually very interesting. I like the cover, the synopsis, and the plot.

However, my only concern for now about your book is the art. As a comic, the aesthetic appeal is very important. As it's the most seen thing in the comic. The level of detail and coloring skills displayed in a comic can be very powerful when used correctly.

Please, try to improve your drawing skills. It is critical to the development of your comic. Unless you decide to make it a kids comic like the Diary of a Whimpey Kid.
If not, then please, there's a lot of room for improvement.

In conclusion, that's all I have concerning your book. I hope my review was able to help.

All the best,
Olisa.

[ThreeeTreees]

Can't wait to dive into all these comics!!! and props to you for keeping track of all those dates I hope to be that organized some day.

Here is my comic, it is a slice of life comic, I just got back from a long hiatus and it updates every Saturday at noon

Saplings | Tapas

[mastermie001]

Sorry, I accidentally reviewed the wrong thing for you.

Okay, so I only have two words to define your whole book.

It's beautiful.

I couldn't read everything, but I like the book. It's like Noelle in Black Clover. If not for the fact that yours is a little different. If not, you have a beautiful thing going on there bud. There's not much to say about a well written book, but to say its good.

[mastermie001]

I'm surprised this book only has 17 views. It's a great beginning to start with. It's fluent and has no noted grammatical issues. Anyways, I don't have much to say except for good luck. Your story is nice. Once you keep on being consistent with it, it will flourish into a beautiful thing one day. I also think your book will do exceptionally well on a platform I have in mind. For now, I wouldn't tell you the name of the platform because there's a catch to it.

However, let me know once you have at least 10 chapters written. I'll help you review it and even put in a few good notices about your book if it meets the criteria of the platform. All in all, i'm trying to help you grow. If you have less than 10 chapters, the chances of you having a good first day viewing will be greatly diminished.

I'll explain the rest later on someday. Just remind me about this day, and Ill help you out.

[mastermie001]

It's the determination and consistency for me. I actually have my book on 10-11 platforms now, and they are doing fantastically well on 7 platforms. As for the rest, I believe they will blow with time.

Now, let's get to work.

#1) Your cover

From your cover, I really don't know what to expect at first. It kind of reminds me of 'You' the show. It's an action/thriller show. However, the character has a terribly dark side of him.

I like the creativity of your work, it's unique and intriguing. This kind of effect, is what you want your readers to feel. You want them to feel compelled to your story, and you have been able to successfully do it with this one. Good job.

#2) Your synopsis

Your synopsis is too long. It gives a little bit of excess information. If they really want to read it, they will. If not, make them read it. Make a good 'hook' or 'pitch' as your synopsis. This way, they will not only be intrigued, but they will be willing to spare an hour or two on your story.

So, in this case, you need to kindly consider and redo your synopsis.

If you think otherwise, look at your views. 500+ people have seen your book, but how many were able to stick with it? Now, assuming you followed my advice, your book can end up looking like this: https://www.anystories.app/books/list or like this https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-creator's-bloodline_20272120706877205

The main point is this, your synopsis along with your actual story is meant to be attractive enough to keep readers coming for more! That being said, let's go to the next phase

#3) Your plot

Like is said previously, the plot and the synopsis have to compliment each other. Think of it like a good early morning breakfast of peanut butter and Jelly sandwich. They two ingredients together tastes wonderful, but once one faults, the sandwich is no longer a PB&J sandwich.

That being said, here's a little advice for you. Either at the end, or towards the end of each chapter, leave an interesting look or event that will give a glimpse of what the next chapter would be like. DO NOT GIVE AWAY EVERYTHING. Just give the chapter an intriguing ending. One like famous Tv shows(not reality shows, actual shows).

In conclusion, your story is really good. I hope I was able to help you.

All the best,
Olisa

[mastermie001]

WONDERFUL! Your work is actually creative and beautiful. I like what you did there with the audio clips. However, here's one problem with that. Are you willing to do this throughout the duration of your book?

Now, let's get to work.

I like the book. It's unique and creative. The double spacing in the book needs to be fixed. For a PC, it looks unprofessional. One can still achieve a two way communication with a normal single spaced line.

Plus, I like the synopsis of your story. However, it's a little bit hard to read. You may want to re-adjust it. There maybe somethings you left out in there because when I read it, it looks incomplete.

Except for these, your book is fine. Jus remember to leave good hooks at the end of each chapter. Trust me, it helps.

[mastermie001]

Okay, so your comics are obviously for kids. So, I'll rate it with kids standards.

Your cover is fun and interesting. Your art work is okay. However, as an author, you can always improve your artwork because its a comic you are drawing.

The plot of the story is okay. Try to add more frames to each chapter because they look too short to be regarded as a kids comic.

Except for these, your book is okay. Good job

[vholdfield]

Thank you, it was really helpful and I will take your advices

[fleurravenbooks]

Thank you so much it means a lot

[fleurravenbooks]

oh and for me it shows around 680 views, maybe it's glitch?
Once again, thank you and ill keep that in mind

[queen_of_spades]

Hi...
already following most of you... and now the ones I hadn't before...
wish you success!
my novel is:

Delilah, forever | Tapas

[denny_b_reese]

Fantasy adventure. Here we go. : )

Embers: Path of Fire Book One | Tapas

[mastermie001]

Yh, maybe. Sorry about that.

[ThreeeTreees]

Thanks for the feed back I was worried about the new cover so I'm glad you liked , I'm actually not a kids comic though but thank you for your advice regardless, it's helpful either way

[fleurravenbooks]

i checked and both of us were right, at the time views of chapter were like you said, while i was looking at all views summed up. No need to apologize

[ImSleepy1]

Destiny's Secrets | Tapas

This is my webcomic, Destiny's Secrets! It's a fantasy mystery series with a diverse cast and I am planning to have around 5 volumes! Hope you enjoy!