Read for Read! Novels Edition(open)

[Aziel]

I read the first two episodes. I liked Bilana's perspective. It kept me engaged since her story seemed more complex.

Witch Tier | Tapas

[Wocalich]

Glad to hear you liked it. Checking out your novel now.

[CommanderMarty]

I read the first three chapters of your novel (I'm a fast reader) and its alright so far.

Anyways I'll place mine in here now.

Title: Jervis T Booker

Genre: Action, Fantasy, Drama

Chapter Count: 20

Summary: Jervis T Booker is one of the heroes who defeated the Orc king, and he is looking for his lost daughter, he must find Nash, the man that is taking care of his daughter, along the journey Jervis will make many friends and enemies.

Jervis T Booker | Tapas

[Wocalich]

Thanks for checking it out! I'll take a look at yours now.

[CommanderMarty]

When you are finished please tell me your thoughts. (I want to know what's done well and what could be improved)

[Wocalich]

Of course, I'll tell you

[Wocalich]

@CommanderMarty
1.You use irregular tense.
2. There should be a reaction from the thieves before they charge at Jervis.
3. wails of agony, not walls of agony
Good parts...I like the swagger Jervis has. Also, the descriptions are pretty good as well.

[CommanderMarty]

I corrected two of these mistakes.

The first and third one. (The irregular tense is mostly used to make the pacing quicker, I do think this gets better as the series continues)

[Wocalich]

I think irregular tense confuses the reader and takes them out of the experience, but it's your choice.

[CommanderMarty]

Honestly I was hoping you would read atleast the first two chapters, but I can't and won't make you because that would be wrong. (Thank you for the feedback)

[WillowTree]

Sure! I'll go check yours out now!

The Love of a Werewolf | Tapas

Edit - I read through the chant and the first chapter. While the story sounds interesting, I tend to struggle getting into 1st person novels. I don't want to subscribe and be a dead sub for you, so I added it to my bookmarks to check out again once I catch up on a couple novels that I'm currently reading.

[apexdraws]

I've already read the first 3 episodes of yours and have been meaning to read more! It really captured my interest, and I'm a big fan of stories with mythology influence.

My novel is also influenced (partially) by mythology

Katabasis | Tapas

[Wocalich]

You don't have to force yourself, I understand. I'll check out yours now. Would you like to hear my commentary as well?
Edit: I'll definitely keep reading this one! You have a new subscriber.

[Wocalich]

Thank you, I'm glad you liked my story! I'll take a look at yours now.

[WillowTree]

It's not forcing! It just takes me a bit more concentration for 1st person! The story itself sounds interesting so I definitely want to keep reading it once I have a little more time and get caught up on the other couple novels!

And thank you I'm happy you enjoyed it!!

[Wocalich]

Got it. Glad to hear you found it interesting.

[sxxaint]

I'm actually gonna be cheeky and drop mine on here being as I already read all of yours and really enjoyed it. Only asking for the first chapter ofc, I just always like new opinions on my stuff

if you already checked it out and it wasn't your thing, totally disregard this

The Stains Beneath Our Skin | Tapas

[Wocalich]

Still out of likes...
Ahaha, sure, I'll check it out.

[sii]

I'd like to participate if you're still looking at some novels. Your synopsis caught my interest so I'll be giving it a read.

My novel is a Dark/Urban Fantasy, it's a little different from most of what gets posted on here.

They Who Rule | Tapas

[Wocalich]

I like the first sentence. It's simple but sets the mood right away.
"Tongue pinched between his teeth"...I like this imagery for some reason.
I like how subtle the introduction of his sexuality is.
Okay, I read the warnings. I think it might be triggering for me to keep reading but I like your writing.