I read the first two episodes. I liked Bilana's perspective. It kept me engaged since her story seemed more complex.
I read the first three chapters of your novel (I'm a fast reader) and its alright so far.
Anyways I'll place mine in here now.
Title: Jervis T Booker
Genre: Action, Fantasy, Drama
Chapter Count: 20
Summary: Jervis T Booker is one of the heroes who defeated the Orc king, and he is looking for his lost daughter, he must find Nash, the man that is taking care of his daughter, along the journey Jervis will make many friends and enemies.
When you are finished please tell me your thoughts. (I want to know what's done well and what could be improved)
@CommanderMarty
1.You use irregular tense.
2. There should be a reaction from the thieves before they charge at Jervis.
3. wails of agony, not walls of agony
Good parts...I like the swagger Jervis has. Also, the descriptions are pretty good as well.
I corrected two of these mistakes.
The first and third one. (The irregular tense is mostly used to make the pacing quicker, I do think this gets better as the series continues)
I think irregular tense confuses the reader and takes them out of the experience, but it's your choice. 
Honestly I was hoping you would read atleast the first two chapters, but I can't and won't make you because that would be wrong. (Thank you for the feedback)
Sure! I'll go check yours out now!
Edit - I read through the chant and the first chapter. While the story sounds interesting, I tend to struggle getting into 1st person novels. I don't want to subscribe and be a dead sub for you, so I added it to my bookmarks to check out again once I catch up on a couple novels that I'm currently reading.
I've already read the first 3 episodes of yours and have been meaning to read more! It really captured my interest, and I'm a big fan of stories with mythology influence.
My novel is also influenced (partially) by mythology 
You don't have to force yourself, I understand. 
I'll check out yours now. Would you like to hear my commentary as well?
Edit: I'll definitely keep reading this one! You have a new subscriber.
It's not forcing! It just takes me a bit more concentration for 1st person! The story itself sounds interesting so I definitely want to keep reading it once I have a little more time and get caught up on the other couple novels! 
And thank you I'm happy you enjoyed it!!
I'm actually gonna be cheeky and drop mine on here being as I already read all of yours and really enjoyed it. Only asking for the first chapter ofc, I just always like new opinions on my stuff
if you already checked it out and it wasn't your thing, totally disregard this
I'd like to participate if you're still looking at some novels. Your synopsis caught my interest so I'll be giving it a read.
My novel is a Dark/Urban Fantasy, it's a little different from most of what gets posted on here.
I like the first sentence. It's simple but sets the mood right away.
"Tongue pinched between his teeth"...I like this imagery for some reason.
I like how subtle the introduction of his sexuality is.
Okay, I read the warnings. I think it might be triggering for me to keep reading but I like your writing.
My novel is a fantasy adventure story, and its still just getting started, but there's plenty more to come still.
Solvi has been living a peaceful life in her village, but not everyone in this world believes in peace. One night, her home is raided by vikings and they steal a prized possession, destroying everything she's known. She decides that it's now her duty to avenge her home and return what was lost.
Ill go check out your story now
Hello I am the writer of a webtoon called peek a boo.Pls do check it out.We just came out with our prologue
I read the first two episodes, the first one cool, but the second one seemed to me like it was so long 
, Idk if that was the effect of my episodes, however, this is mine
â—Ź Name: Age of Magic
â—Ź Genre: Fantasy, Action, Mystery, Magic
â—Ź Summary:
500 years ago, people believed that a great earthquake divided a huge continent into three ones . These three lived in peace until the day when a village got destroyed leaving one survivor. A boy named Leo, but little did he know of the adventure that awaited him.
â—Ź Why should you read it ?
Hmmm, If you like elves and demons or dragons, it's gonna be here, if you wanna see the journey of boy who lost everything and wants to get stronger in order to get his revenge, it's also gonna be here, if you like magical stuff, and how it works ( There're available episodes that explain how magic works " The origin of magic " check them out if you wanna know how, and let me know ur opinion about it ), or maybe you like competitions, and if you didn't find any of this, just know that it's just the beginning .
â—Ź Hopefully you check it out
The style of it 
That's okay, this is a casual thing after all. I'll take a look at your story now. I don't understand why you subscribed though, if you didn't like it
Hello, thanks for applying. Would you like me to give feedback as well or just read?
Edit: Also, have you read the first chapter?
@wocalichofficial yes, I read it. I'm okay if you just read the story. I appreciate comments but there is no pressure.
Here's all of my novels: have fun everyone.
Genre: High Fantasy Medical Drama
In a world, where a war of the gods and hellish titans caused all of the land to become perpetually floating in the air, there are all sorts of strange things happening: bird-people, strange magics, ships that fly in the air and strangely, people liked it. One day, a young cleric of the northern kingdom has visions of the vulture born plague doctor that will save their world from a cataclysmic plague and does all he can to help, even if it means becoming her assistant...and falling in love in the process. Does he risk her research on the plague to reveal his feelings, or does he keep them contained so she can work without distraction?
Genre: High Fantasy Graphic Horror
A kingdom of magic, science and incredible words is laid in ruins by a far larger, but less magical kingdom, they killed all who they saw as a threat, enslaved the people and now...someone is returning the favor, personally killing everyone they can in the attacking kingdom TW: This novel is...horribly graphic, has horrible language and makes Saw and Game of Thrones look G-Rated
Genre; High Fantasy LGBT Romance
Two magical kingdoms have been at war for decades, one day the prince of one finds an injured solider of the other kingdom who ends up being a prince of the other kingdom, the other prince decides to offer his own hand in marriage to stop the war...but does it work out well?
Genre: Low Fantasy Magical College Slice of life +POC LGBT MC
A young man finds out that his mother...may not have been human, quickly into a new life at a college for people of nonhuman origin, he and a group of his friends end up being drawn into a horribly destructive prophecy...and learning about themselves and others in the process
Genre: Low Fantasy Goth Drama/Comedy
An abandoned mansion is quickly renovated by a quirky and unique family of goths who have the disposition of living sunshine and rainbows, how will this strange family turn their Americana town on its head and reveal that...nobody is who they appear and nothing is as it appears?
Genre: Science Fiction Futurism Romance
The World has fallen: the ice caps melted flooding the world, the atmosphere has thinned to the point solar flares nearly touch the surface, humans had to adapt by altering their DNA with animals to adapt to the harsher environments. One morning, a socialite man of the ocean based new country finds himself engaged to an heiress of the desert country, but they end up perfect for each other...or do they?