I have to agree with what someone else said on the first paragraph in your novel. There's no distinction in between the two people talking which can be confusing.
3rd and 4th paragraph, the sentences needed some commas in places where you would make a slight pause in normal speech. I.E.('Nobody, it seemed, but Aashvi...')
Also 5th paragraph I you have a Aashi instead of Aashvi down, and in your second chapter I found some words mixed up in the order they should have been written. We all make those kind of mistakes, to err is human.
There's a lot of information that can be overwhelming and confusing very quickly and when a new person is talking, it should be the start of a new line, paragraph, etc. It helps in preventing confusion or trying to sort who is saying what.
Overall, I see the potential in your story, and I will continue to read it as you release episodes.
*Thank you for your comments on my novel. Glad I was able to balance the cringe factor with some humor for you. *