I took a look at your chapter. You found characters that can certainly be sympathetic. However, nearly every sentence starts with either a name of the character or a pronoun. Consider looking into ways to integrate the backdrops and varying the sentence structure for the text to become a bit less monotone.
I like your comic so far! The first episode is golden
Thank you! I will look into that! (did you want a critique on yours while we're doing a read for read, or no?)
Do you update every day of the week? Because that's cool
I deduced peeps want reads in this one, and picked yours for a read as it is the closest to my interests. I am not looking for reciprocation, just swinging by
@redfeather714 I just subbed to yours actually. I'll post my novel in case you want to give it a look. Its got a brand new opening couple of chapters.
A young female orc escapes a human archmage. Blessed with all his knowledge of magic, she joins a human adventuring party to begin her own life.
Thank you for the support! I'll take a look at your story in just a minute!
You have an amazing talent when it comes to writing action scenes!
@redfeather714 Thanks! I wrote a comic for a while, and setting those up, even though I'm not an amazing artist, helped me start visualizing action scenes.
I like your story so far. It's got some spice right off the bat.
Thanks! It's kind of a rollercoaster ride for Tara, but at least it has its positive moments to go with the negative
I'm going to read more of yours later tonight after I finish working on next week's chapters
Ohhh well I'm glad I could capture your interest for a time! I have already recorded your feedback in a word document and will implement it when I do revisions~!
I do it right now...but once I'm done with Volume 1 for Volume 2 it will be on a schedule basis....so twice a week mostly?
Thatās cool, I wish I could update daily, but I spend too much time criticizing everything I write to get anything done lol
I know those feels..My first one was very impromptu....But I've been very careful about the second one
I feel like Iāve been improving over time in my writing. My sequel will probably be much better than my current novel
Thats the best part!
Here is mine
Here's mine
@lilyvoug Iām actually subbed to Artemis already, so Iāll read the new episode sometime tonight when I get a chance
@blazeriddle Yours sounds really interesting! If you havenāt already, Iād love it if you took a look at my novel. Once I finish working, Iāll read yours
Aaaa haha thank you lol
