Alright, I don't know what you're level of writing or if English is your first language or you're just starting out, so I don't know how gentle to be with you, but there's a lot that needs work and I'm not going to go through in detail like I would for others because there's a lot more fundemental stuff needs doing first.
First impressions, your cover is alright but very dark and hard to see when it's so small. On top of that, your thumbnails for your episodes have no consistency with each other or the cover, and I'm not sure what they have to do with the chpaters, which makes them feel like you got them from places you shouldn't have.
You summary needs work. It doesn't tell me anything about your story. If I wasn't here to give you feedback, I wouldn't read a story without knowing what it's about. And without a summary to assure me the story is going somewhere, the first chapter doesn't give me any clue.
As for the first chapter itself: there's a mistake in the second sentence. "That too in the middle of nowhere." That doesn't make any sense as a sentence. Your opening seems entirely disconnected to the rest of the chapter. I'm not entirely sure what's going on. It's not clear enough. You introduce a lot all at once without taking time to make sure it's all introduced properly. Your narration style is both oddly formal and old fashioned while also being strangely casual and chatty, and your dialogue is written as some kind of script-prose dialogue that's very strange and uncomfortable to read.
Please don't think it's all terrible, or that I hate it all, it's by far not the worst thing I've read on Tapas, but it's not clear what your story is abut or where it's going or who your characters are, all of which is pretty useful to get people sticking around.
