I think your comic is really cool! And the art is phenomenal--lots of dynamics, lots of color, lots of wonderful painting going on with fun characters and a lot of love.
That being said I'm not...entirely sure how you'd write it for a TV show? It's not episodic, and fits more into how a movie script would be. But, I'm sure that you've got some different scripts that you're using for that pitch. From the sounds of things you've been there done that with animation pitches and so you got all that worked out. So part of why I didn't respond before was because I just figured...the pitch would be soo different from the comic that my opinion here might not...matter? I can't really see the television show looking like how the comic looks (mostly because TV animation can't afford to be as beautiful as your comic is. You got some really lovely light and shadow that just...I can't see being done for animation unless it were at a movie budget.)
Like I'm not sure why you need to assemble reviews for a page in your pitch bible from a forum, but if that's what this studio needs for your pitch, then go ahead and use my nicest sentences to your hearts content, and I hope it's what they're looking for. If you need more quotes to fill that page, just hit me up and I'll just...give you lots of nice words you can use saying how great your story is. I can be really wordy.
But for critiques:
-I skipped all of the gag-a-day stuff, mostly because I...didn't really care about that so much as I cared about the plot. I like reading fantasy, so I'm here for the fantasy stuff. So thank you for mentioning right at the beginning that it really doesn't start until the color pages start.
You got your script edited down to it's bare bones of what's needed for this story (and I like your dialogue and I think it's pretty solid), but if I wasn't so engaged by the art (which is SO good), I would not have known where the plot was coming or going and probably would have signed out. Stuff just kinda happens, and it happens so fast. You are catapulted into an adventure with a lot of overlapping threads, and I do enjoy the characters and all of that, but there are some things that were like "why is this happening?" because I didn't really understand the rules of your world. Like I'm thankful there isn't a ton of prologue, but it's totally fine to slow down and just give me some establishing background so things don't feel quite so random. I'm really thankful that we're getting some more of that lore in the later updates, so I think this is something you're already kind of aware of and have been working towards adding anyways. But that was my biggest gripe, and it's not that big. I like your story quite a bit.
-I would say that I was most interested in the adventure of Mallory, which is good because she's the main character. I'm not sure what's going on with the Lord of the Flies brigade or Geoffrey the talking Ape. But they are funny, so I don't dislike them or anything. I think in part because the lighting and coloring is rendered so beautifully, there's this expectation of reality, which is making the absurdism seem more absurd, if that makes sense. There's Tex Avery hijinks happening but my expectations is like...so far from Tex Avery because I'm just loving this glossy rendering on all these leaves.
Like seriously you are one human and you drew and painted all this? Like man. Man! I love the style going on. Real fluid, real fun, and it has so much animation already. Like generally webcomics try and do the most economical art styles possible to get content out quickly, and then there's comics like this that are few and far between that are such labors of love, with the emphasis on "labor." I can tell that you have a lot of love for this story and so it makes me excited to see future updates.
-As far as having a good sense of the world--I went over it before about how I just need more...establishing. But I also have a hard time connecting the forest with the suburb next door. It almost feels like maybe they aren't aware of eachother? But then when you meet the Grandmother, she's so upset because of things that go back to this forest, that it's clear that at least some people do recognize the forest and see how dangerous it is. It's all a mystery unfolding, which is interesting. I would love to see more about the history of the people and their relationship to the magic/science happening in this forest.
but overall, it's just a really unique world that still feels very familiar. The characters are beautifully drawn, the pacing is a lot of fun, and the quality is just really, truly impressive.