Review the Comic above You!

[antimekii]

Hello, It's my first time reviewing a series. I don't know how to go about this so I'm really sorry, I hope I can help somehow.

Zotagius is a story about a secluded boy who one day lost his mom and ventured out to find her.

Characters:
Tobias and Eskil are textbook bland characters. The main character, Tobias was a bored kid babysitted by his mom by weeks/months. Of course, he needed to be the curious kid who wanted to see the outside world. I don't think anything is wrong with this trope but I did find him a bit "Mary Sue" in the start. He kept up with Eskil even tho he's a kid w/o exercise. Also, It's already hinted that he maybe do have strange powers, sorry I don't like the shounen trope of the main character being special because of his powers. Eskil on the other hand, is the classic leader badass with traumatic past. Anika is very interesting, not because of her
badass I'll can rekt those zombies down thing but because of her personality. Responsible, fun but savage. I'd like to see more of her personality and I'm hoping she won't be a "Mary Sue" too. Markus is edgy, he's the walking comic relief for me now. Mom has a great design, very interesting I'd love to see more of her. Remi is the best character in this series so far, he's the most reasonable of all the characters.

Art
I could be nit picky about some bubbles and the font size but it improved on the latest chapters. I love how the panels feel cinematic, there's a background in every panel and I feel like I'm reading in between the cuts. I'll probably suggest to put some panels indicating a pause between a moment cause sometimes it feels sudden.

Story:
It's running on a simple plot of a boy with "maybe" special powers looking for his mom who's probably hiding a bigass twist somewhere. Dialogues are well paced and character banters are amusing. I probably have a zombie story fatigue but I'm sure people in this genre would love this, I think the biggest missing thing in the story is the hook. There's no need to be eye catchy or mind-bending but everything in this story felt weirdly ordinary. Maybe try to gamble a little? the story feels a bit too safe but I'm sure you'll make it more interesting.

Overall Zotagius is a well written story with mildly interesting characters and pretty art.

My comic: Mosquito Girl AAAAAhh, I think I reviewed the comic above me harshly but I don't know how to go about it. So just murder my ass too. I hope I'll do better.

[pwh13]

@antimekii Reserving this spot for review. INCOMING REVIEW. SOON.

Okay, first impressions.

Fourth wall breaking, normally I'm not all for that kind of stuff, but in measured amounts it's a great comic relief. I'm glad to say that your fourth wall breaking seems to be hilariously tied into the story. Also, instantly a fan of Liam and Aleska. I don't know why. There is a lot of dynamic threads of drama happening, and it's a good thing that you're not dumping on it all at once. There are a few parts of confusion where I had to go back and read a few pages to kind of grasp who was who, mainly the interests between the others and Aleska.

What's nice that I've noticed so far is that the streams of internal monologues seem to really pull some emotional strings for me. I did come across quite a few spots of comical bursts, IE "I don't think the shippers will approve", that make me burst out laughing. It's a little strange, it might just be personal preference for me, but you seem to try to keep the story as light as possible without getting too dark with emotions; I could see it getting even darker. But hey, that's personal preference/suggestion. Some of the comedic timing feels a little forced at times, but it's definitely not a show-stopper. I've noticed in the later pages that this seems to slow down quite a bit, which I think is a good thing.

With some mild confusion in the earlier pages: trying to figure out this love-octogramish thing, it seems to have kind of eased out a bit as you've tapered down with the influx of new characters. Each character seems to have varied and interesting personalities.

Art wise, I think from the start to the newest page there has been a pretty drastic improvement to how you're settling into this kind of style of comic. Expressions are hilarious, and emotions show.

Earlier pages had very busy line-work that blended into the rest of the line-work with similar weight. Now there is a bit more confidence in your line weight. I've noticed a bit more of a painterly approach to the newer backgrounds. In some events I think it works well, but like the page here: https://tapastic.com/episode/96273 , I think the background work was really outstanding. Time intensive, yeah, but it had that kind of rigidity to it. Later pages seem to drop most of the line-work, but even some loose dark lines might help bring that kind of rigidity back.

Normally I'm not a huge fan of these kind of comics, but it has this novel charm about it that makes me want more. Total shipping haram thing going on too, that's fun. Subscribed.

My Comic: Brujagh

[TrustyShamrock]

reviving this thread cuz its kewl
so Brujagh is pretty long so i didnt read the whole thing. but i read the 1st and part of the 2nd chapter! its a futuristic scifi cop story about a lady named sierra vesping (cool name)
art:
FIRST i do really like the banner. its a good attention getter and fits the story pretty good. i think the art style of the whole comic also does a really good job of fittin the story. its dark and gritty and all that. kinda like noir comics. it gets the street cop vibe down right from the start. sometimes it gets a little too dark so its hard to see whats going on tho
the robot and alien designs are pretty cool. theyre creative but they dont stand out in a way thats weird to have them there. they just seem like normal people. which is i think what ya were going for
the people designs are ok too. i can tell them all apart but they do kinda start to look the same after a while. maybe if you gave they more different body types or messed around with eye and nose shapes itd help
the backrounds are really good. and you pretty much always have a backround too instead of just puttin the characters in front of a blank panel. so thats a lot of work and im impressed with it.
i also like the way you move around the view in the panels instead of having everythin head on to the characters face. it keeps the long talky scenes from gettin boring

story: the first page wasnt my favorite part since it sorta seems like a big info dump with a lot of long text blocks. after that tho everythin flows really great! the story goes at a good speed and i get whats going on without havin backstory and facts shoved in my face. also you showed what its like for sierra to live with her sick mother using just a few panels in a way that made a lot of sense
i like the way the aliens have their own lifestyles which ya do a good job of puttin in little bits of into the story. you also do a good job of showin all the futurey problems while still keepin it realistic and easy to understand
the plot is really serious and im not the best at reviewing that sorta stuff (sorry!). but it definitely seems like ya know what youre doing with it
SO. good art thats fits the mood! just sorta hard to tell whats going on sometimes. and good story even tho it goes sorta over my head a bit

heres my comic: Robo Hole

[ChipGod]

Ill reread chapter one and judge that. I remember reading this for a Guest Comic i did for ya.
First, i couldnt really get into it at first. The first few pages were a little of key to me, but that could honestly be because i perfer gag comics.
The art is good, i could see it going along with the story well. Each character seems to have a distinct look for themselves, which is needed in a good comic.
The story is, like i said, not hooking for me. Im sure that people who are into this stuff will like it, but i didnt as much.
Im sorry i couldnt write as much, im not a very detailed reviewer. I hope this helps you, and i wish you luck.
My comic: https://tapastic.com/series/The-Way-of-the-World

[Down_the_Rabbithole]

Okay. I've looked through some pages in your comic.

You've got a gag comic, so I know that things like backgrounds aren't really necessary. I can tell you're going for something simplistic in your style which works for gag comics. However the anatomy of your character designs needs some work. Especially those shoulders. They look like they're separate entities from the body half of the time.

Now for your writing. I hate to sound super harsh, but the jokes just aren't funny. I think it would help you if each character was more distinct from each other. I know there's a goth-type guy and he seems to be the most distinct from the others. Other than that, there was that one girl with the bad puns and that's all I can tell from the characters.

I hope this didn't hurt too much. I really think you can improve.
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Now, my comic is in its early pages. I'm only up to page seven right now, so I'm expecting mostly art critique (not much dialogue yet). Here it is, though.

My Friends in Distantland

[nessiefynn]

Here's my review for My Friends in Dreamland, @Down_the_Rabbithole

I'll start off with some positives. I think your major strength so far is your character designs. They're unique, expressive and charming. They remind me of Don Bluth's work, and those owl-mime monsters you have are honestly pretty cool looking. On a similar note, you can really show a lot of motion with your figures, like when your blue fella here signs on page 5. All this is making me wonder if you have a background in animation? : o

As for things that could be improved, I like that you have backgrounds, they add a lot more atmosphere to your secenes, but I feel they sometimes look a little off. On page 2 the clock tower is out or perspective, but I feel like your backgrounds in general are being held back by your use of color. Your color palette is a bit dull, when it feels like it's trying to be more colorful. On page 3, for example, the dark green shading on the jacket and hat really doesn't work with the rest of the color scheme, which is mostly either blueish or desaturated browns. You already have very bright blues dominating the background, so perhaps you could try making the jackets either a little bluer or duller to better harmonize with the color scheme?

I think one last thing you could do to make your comic look more polished is tighten up your speech bubbles, sound effects, and panels. The current font you're using for speech, while they'res nothing inherently wrong with it, just doesn't really seem to fit with the story you're telling. It might just be me, but it looks very businesslike, it doesn't reflect how the story is cartoon-ish and has fantastical elements! I think the comic could look nicer with a looser font. The speech bubbles themselves often just look kinda awkward in a way that's hard to describe. Here's some general tips for speech bubbles that you could use as reference.

Overall, I think your comic has a lot of potential right now, but there's also a lot that can be improved upon. And that's just fine! Your comic's just starting, you've got plenty of time to work out all the kinks as you continue to draw it! I subbed, as it seemed interesting so far! Good luck! : D

My comic is Household Slime Mold, if anyone wants to give that one another look. : P

[Down_the_Rabbithole]

Thank you so very much for all the feedback! Especially that speech bubble ref! This is really helpful!

And yes, I do have a background in animation. I originally wanted this to be an animated series, but I don't have the means to make it right now. I'm doing it in comic form first to perhaps drum up interest for an animated series. If I can't make one, at least I'm telling the story I want to tell.

[ChipGod]

Nono, this helps me! Thanks for the input!