Reviewing comics and novels

samvv000 2021-09-01 15:18:48 UTC #21

Thanks for the opportunity! Mine has only four episodes; I feel like the first two are enough to maybe get an idea of the trippy vibe I'm going for. I'd love if it intrigues you enough to do more, but there's plenty of people already swarming the thread, so I'm not gonna push it.

Eliteone 2021-09-01 16:03:03 UTC #22

I read the 40 pages of the first chapter.

In the beginning, I didn't understand much about the deal. I hope we get to see more about that in the upcoming chapters. The first panel in which the hellscape hospital is illustrated got me excited.

I expected the characters in the hospital to be scary and each one having an impactful entrance. An eerie and scary setting would have suited the story, instead, the characters seemed to be cheerful.

I liked the panel in which you introduced the computer guy. It had a mysterious setting to it.

For the art, I don't think I can say much because I am still a beginner, but I think you have a grasp of what you want to draw. For eg, page 5. I liked it the most.

Saint01 2021-09-01 16:14:17 UTC #23

Review as much as you see fit.

My story(web novel):

Inspired by works such as Ghost in the Shell, Ergo Proxy, Serial Experiments Lain, and Akira, Technocyte: Beyond Human follows Detectives Beatrice Alice Moreau and Jay Lee Jones, an amnesiac man named Sherlock Lawson, and a mysterious young girl named Mina in a cyberpunk/ dystopian like setting as they uncover the truth behind Sherlock's elusive past and his connection to the Technocytes, enhanced humans who are able to morph metal around their bodies and manipulate technology, and the organization responsible for creating them known as SANCTUARY.

R.n.P 2021-09-01 16:57:16 UTC #24

Sure I'll check yours out

vholdfield 2021-09-01 18:54:09 UTC #25

I would love some feedback

Eliteone 2021-09-02 02:40:05 UTC #26

I read the first four Episodes, and your description of the the characters feeling and their physical conditions is what I find admirable. Even in these short stories we get an idea about the personality of the character and his goals. For eg in the fourth episode everything about Max was well written.

I don't have to much to say about the story cause these are a group of short stories. What I wanted to ask, I understood the tragic ending in epi 3 when someone had abducted Connor. But what was the tragic ending in episodes 1,2 and 4? I didn't get it. And also the story revolves around the four main characters so I didn't understand how it is a group of short stories. So is the group of first 6 episodes a short story?

Overall I liked it. But if these are short stories then the ending should be more tragic and unexpected to surprise the reader to make them want more, is what I would suggest.

Lilmonstart 2021-09-02 03:16:07 UTC #27

will defiinitelly check out your novel it looks good and seems interesting will give it a read when I can

well...here´s my comic if you wanna check it out it isn´t much but here it is ._.

jeffanime1 2021-09-02 03:19:45 UTC #28

Here's mine Tell me what you think

Manyana 2021-09-02 05:54:43 UTC #29

Here's my novel. You can react/review as many chapters as you want. Thank you!

Title: Talipandas
Type: Novel
Genre: Fantasy, Slice of Life, Romance
Status: On-going
Description: When spoiled rich girl Ari's life ends, she finds herself reborn as Princess Iris in a fantasy world created by her childhood imaginary friend! But being a princess comes with being the last hope to remove an evil curse from the royal bloodline, which would be a lot easier if she hadn't inherited the most useless kind of magic in the world.
Content Warning: two paragraphs of sexual content in the whole entirety of the book, mental health issues, and countless profanities.
Latest Chapter: Chapter 54.1: House of Hundred Doors
Chapter Link: https://tapas.io/episode/2281188

Shazic 2021-09-02 06:50:32 UTC #30

I would love a review of the first 5 chapters please I been rewriting my book from the ground up hoping to connect it to the other later chapters someday however yeah I want to know if my rewrites are any good if not I probably a little sad but its cool be honest okay

Aeneas1 2021-09-02 07:27:32 UTC #31

Here is mine.

WoollyPAR 2021-09-02 08:09:52 UTC #32

I'd like the first 5 chapters of my comic reviewed, I feel like reading all of them will give you a better idea of what the story is about than just the first one, as it's rather short and doesn't cover much (only 14 pages)

dsptss78 2021-09-02 14:03:10 UTC #34

Thank you for this wonderful opportunity. I'm open to an honest review of the first five chapters of dan.

rj_rals 2021-09-02 14:11:27 UTC #35

Thanks! Just checked out yours and subbed. Cool opening

EchoMan 2021-09-02 14:21:28 UTC #36

I'd appreciate a review on the first five chapters. Feel free to check out my novel and subscribe if you're interested:

Peach-fly 2021-09-02 16:23:00 UTC #37

Hi! I'd love if you could review either the 1st chapter or all of them, I only have three Thank you so much for your offer. I'll go check yours!

extazybomb 2021-09-02 17:11:03 UTC #38

Thank you so much!

The story actually have one main plot. The "short stories" refer to the characters past which will unfold in the main story. The next episode will reveal how they are all connected and how they met\meet each other.

English is my second language and I was really nervous with the descriptions. I always felt my vocabulary is limited so you saying the description is good and clear is really encouraging!!

I think this is the fist time someone actually read my novel.
I cant thank you enough!!
Thank you so so much!!

lumisullivan 2021-09-02 17:35:55 UTC #39

Sure here's mine

N1ghtm4r3 2021-09-03 00:43:33 UTC #40

if you enjoy scifi fanatsy action try mine out

Eliteone 2021-09-03 00:47:41 UTC #41

I liked how you introduced the characters in the prologue with all the characters drinking something and thinking about the one they like and that each one of them have different problems. Your writing and grammar is also good.

The only thing I would say is the pacing of the chapter. 80% of the episode is about Annalise thoughts even though she meets two new characters. When you are talking about her crush Nicholas fisher, instead of just telling what her relationship with him is and that she gets nervous in front of him. Show that through a conversation. That she is stammering infront of him or getting started by his small actions or something.

And the a detailed description of the scenes will help coz jumping from scene to scene is seen a lot in few para's. The length of the episode is small so making these changes will also help with that.

That's all!

I liked the premise that you have set up. And that this is not just some typical highschool romance. I was bored of reading about school drama and wanted to read some adult love. So i will try to catch up. Good luck!