Reviewing comics and novels

Eliteone 2021-09-01 06:31:11 UTC #1

Okay, so here's the thing. Put the link for you web novel or
comic series and choose whether you want me to review just the first chapter or the first 5 chapters. I will try my best to read as many comics and novels as possible.

I am still a beginner in art so I won't be able to write a good review for the comics but I will check them out for sure.

I am just 15 subscribers away from a 100 subs. I want you to give the prologue of my webnovel series - A Demon Gives An Entrance Exam a try and a review would be highly appreciated.

You can subscribe and read further only if you like it.

That's all! Let the reading begin!

Here is the link for my web novel. - A Demon Gives an Entrance Exam.

Check out A Demon Gives an Entrance Exam on Tapas https://tapas.io/series/A-Demon-Gives-an-Entrance-Exam

Asura, a demon, infamous for his intimidating powers and cruel tactics is betrayed by his only friend on his journey to becoming the demon king. Reincarnated as a 16-year-old human with the purpose to crack an entrance exam which is supposedly the most difficult task in the universe, Asura has a second chance to prove his worth.

Correcting his past mistakes, Asura has now decided to lead this life as a loner and not to trust anyone. Underneath the peaceful and simple life of the human world, he discovers the dark nature of humans, which is not very different from the demons.

Even after being a very hard worker, Asura finds himself struggling with his studies. Using his demon tactics, he tackles the challenges that fall upon him and his classmates.

Join Asura on his journey and super relatable academic problems.

kmatsanga007 2021-09-01 10:15:09 UTC #2

Sure. Hope you like it.

FlorenceV 2021-09-01 10:59:07 UTC #3

Read as much as you want

I liked your novel, prologue ends very funny.

kaykitsune 2021-09-01 11:17:43 UTC #4

Here’s mine, hope you enjoy I’ll check yours out

RSung 2021-09-01 11:39:30 UTC #5

Here's mine.

hcollinsziviski 2021-09-01 11:39:49 UTC #6

I don't mind either way.

delladz 2021-09-01 12:05:43 UTC #7

Here's mine if you wanna check it out! Yours looks really cool for sure!

Stargazer31 2021-09-01 12:09:17 UTC #8

Sure, here's mine

Lirina 2021-09-01 12:23:14 UTC #9

This is mine, am always looking to get feedback

MK_Wizard 2021-09-01 13:09:54 UTC #10

Here are my three webcomics. You can choose whichever to review.

thecrystalrook 2021-09-01 13:15:00 UTC #11

Read as much as you like! I would say get through at least the first 4 or 5 so you can see the art improving over time.

extazybomb 2021-09-01 13:30:05 UTC #12

I only have 6 episodes so far so you can read as much as you want. Thank you

mrtoontastic 2021-09-01 13:32:44 UTC #13

Could you review the first 5 chapters of my novel?

rj_rals 2021-09-01 14:20:15 UTC #14

Love how you tied everything together at the end of your prologue haha it's great!

Here's my novel, would love to hear thoughts on the first Chapter part! (Ch. 1.1)

hamza9644 2021-09-01 14:20:56 UTC #15

him im following u hop u like min ^^

hamza9644 2021-09-01 14:22:14 UTC #16

hi im folowing u this is min ^^

hamza9644 2021-09-01 14:22:43 UTC #17

hello im subbed this is min

Eliteone 2021-09-01 14:31:21 UTC #18

Sorry for the late reply, I got lost on the path called life.

I read the first 2 episodes and the first thing that pops up is your grammar and the description. That is the one thing I struggle with the most. We get a gesture of the modern world. Then we time skip 20 years later to meet adult Mwene. He is a cheerful and adventurous character that is easy to love. The concepts like - are God dead, the dome, the sky is falling seem interesting.

What I would suggest is to focus more on the main character's goal and the setting of the series before introducing more characters and including casual conversations that don't contribute much to the story in the early part so that the readers can get an idea early on about what the series is about.

At the end of episode 2 where the mom does in the accident. I would have put more conversations of Mwene with his mom rather than him and his newly introduced friend to have a deeper impact on the reader.

That's all I have to say right now. I would read more when I get time, so keep grinding brother

Give my we novel a try when you get time

jenessamdsilva 2021-09-01 14:46:19 UTC #19

Read as much as you like. Looking forward to your feedback.

Eliteone 2021-09-01 14:53:04 UTC #20

Let's see what do we have here.

Firstly, the description -

I would suggest rewriting the description more fluently instead of abruptly jumping from telling about the first heir to another.

The heir of ABC is on his journey to regain his rights while the heir of XYZ is fighting for the independence of his fallen kingdom - instead of using one of them and the other.

Episode 1 - the first episode is the first impression for your series, so one must make sure to put extra effort into it, to grab the attention of the readers. The first episode was very small and the description of the surroundings, the appearance of characters and the way they talk is very limited. These things help to improve the reading experience. Try to increase the length of the chapters.

The grammar is weak and needs improvement. Don't worry you are not alone. I struggle a lot with grammar and description of the surrounding area and actions. Practice is the only thing that can help us.

Episode 2 -I liked the power setting and the names of the characters, but the flow of the story and the introduction of the characters is abrupt and can be improved. Working on the flow can truly help a lot, which is why I try to revise my chapters a few times before finalizing them.

I tried to give a short honest criticism. I hope these points can help you.