Reviewing comics and novels

rj_rals 2021-09-02 14:11:27 UTC #35

Thanks! Just checked out yours and subbed. Cool opening

EchoMan 2021-09-02 14:21:28 UTC #36

I'd appreciate a review on the first five chapters. Feel free to check out my novel and subscribe if you're interested:

Peach-fly 2021-09-02 16:23:00 UTC #37

Hi! I'd love if you could review either the 1st chapter or all of them, I only have three Thank you so much for your offer. I'll go check yours!

extazybomb 2021-09-02 17:11:03 UTC #38

Thank you so much!

The story actually have one main plot. The "short stories" refer to the characters past which will unfold in the main story. The next episode will reveal how they are all connected and how they met\meet each other.

English is my second language and I was really nervous with the descriptions. I always felt my vocabulary is limited so you saying the description is good and clear is really encouraging!!

I think this is the fist time someone actually read my novel.
I cant thank you enough!!
Thank you so so much!!

lumisullivan 2021-09-02 17:35:55 UTC #39

Sure here's mine

N1ghtm4r3 2021-09-03 00:43:33 UTC #40

if you enjoy scifi fanatsy action try mine out

Eliteone 2021-09-03 00:47:41 UTC #41

I liked how you introduced the characters in the prologue with all the characters drinking something and thinking about the one they like and that each one of them have different problems. Your writing and grammar is also good.

The only thing I would say is the pacing of the chapter. 80% of the episode is about Annalise thoughts even though she meets two new characters. When you are talking about her crush Nicholas fisher, instead of just telling what her relationship with him is and that she gets nervous in front of him. Show that through a conversation. That she is stammering infront of him or getting started by his small actions or something.

And the a detailed description of the scenes will help coz jumping from scene to scene is seen a lot in few para's. The length of the episode is small so making these changes will also help with that.

That's all!

I liked the premise that you have set up. And that this is not just some typical highschool romance. I was bored of reading about school drama and wanted to read some adult love. So i will try to catch up. Good luck!

Eliteone 2021-09-03 03:59:26 UTC #42

You don't have to thank me. I enjoyed reading it. I like reading tragic stories.

Just keep on writing and interacting with more people and I am sure many people will read your novel.

jenessamdsilva 2021-09-03 04:24:47 UTC #43

Thank you so much. Appreciate the feedback! Will keep your advice in mind.

Eliteone 2021-09-03 04:46:58 UTC #46

I started reading your novel without reading the description and when I got to the second chapter where they debate about a love traingle. After finishing it I read the summary and I was actually excited to that the thing they once debated on will become their reality.

I liked how you started the story with a tense, nervous and hot situation. I had to read a few lines twice to understand what you wanted to tell in the first chapter but the grammer improved in the second chapter. Your description of Thomas's reactions and the university rooms was great.

I enjoy reading boy's love so keep those chapters coming

Eliteone 2021-09-03 06:25:30 UTC #47

This was, for sure, my best read for the day. I don't think I can find any flaws in it.

I am personally a big fan of first person POV (which is the same case in my own novel). And I got a feeling that you read a lot of police related novels before starting to write this great work. From the description of the city to the process of lightning up the cigarette, from the thrilling well written action scenes to telling about the past of the country. I loved everything.

Definitely keeping up with this novel.

EchoMan 2021-09-03 09:32:54 UTC #48

Thanks a lot for the review, I really appreciate it. I'm glad you liked it, hope you continue to enjoy the work .

AwesomeSoFar 2021-09-03 14:14:51 UTC #49

Here's mine! it's short, so it won't take you long to check it out!

Ihateyou12 2021-09-04 04:20:42 UTC #50

This is my work. I'm sure you'll love it as soon as you read it. If you like it, don't hesitate to subscribe.

Eliteone 2021-09-04 08:34:31 UTC #51

You were right. I fell in love with it as soon as I read it.

I usually don't read the description of the novel to keep the factor of surprise. And I did not expect such a story at all from the title name.

Even though I am a guy I somewhat felt what the girl was going through coz I have heard my mom telling the same stuff to my sister and because I am from a traditional old belief family.

There are a few dialogues that I have a grammatical mistakes. But the frequency of those errors decreased as the chapters progressed.

I loved the description of her feeling through her surroundings. The birds, branches and the wind. That is something I don't think I have ever tried at all. The girl is not always rejecting her situation and even finding few moments of happiness and reasonable to live even in that hell. I find that very realistic.

I don't think there is any problem in the pacing of the story or the story itself. I really loved reading it. I believe your novel will get more attention if you spread it to more people and keep on putting up new chapters.

Definitely keeping up with you beautiful novel.

tjjha 2021-09-04 08:58:19 UTC #52

Feel free checking on both.One was originally based in Podcast.Thanks for the thread!

tomkaplan06 2021-09-04 12:15:56 UTC #53

Ok! Hope you enjoy

https://tapas.io/series/Language-of-the-Heart

ImSleepy1 2021-09-08 18:00:43 UTC #54

Here is mine!

arelmieres 2021-09-08 19:22:34 UTC #55

A beautiful story crafted to enthrall you and have you wanting more. If you seek action, adventure and a plot that melds together beautifully, come give my novel a try. I don't need anything more than your patience and time; allow yourself to be entranced.

Some scenes may contain gore and excessive violence so be careful.

Jwebtoons 2021-09-13 03:49:58 UTC #56

My battle shonen story inspired by many other battle shonen stories. And a Halloween action apocalypse. If both is too much then you can pick just one story.