Summary/Outline review *spoilers for Candy Pop Corpse

[spicy_sweets]

So I'm currently writing a novel on wattpad and plan to post the revised version here. Does anyone mind taking a peek and sharing their thoughts on the concept?

Trello board CPC (Hoping this works) - https://trello.com/b/cMlk2XUX/cpc.

[spicy_sweets]

Hmm. Too incomplete?

[saintc]

I can't seem to be able to view it.

[spicy_sweets]

Ah hell, forgot to make it public

[saintc]

Great, I can see it now!

[saintc]

I like the concept so far. Especially how you're taking something seemingly innocent (a candy shop), and using it to create a horror story.

I wasn't able to see the outline for some chapters (I'm not sure why? Were they removed) but from the bits and pieces I've seen the story looks great, and it seems like it's going to be fastpaced.

[spicy_sweets]

oof, I tend to switch between trello and google docs so I might've forgotten to paste those in (´-﹏-`；)

The beginning 15ish chapters... I'm guessing I didn't put them in 'cause those were already written. As for the last 9, I intend to make those the actual ending chapters. Originally wanted to end this on 40 chapters but figured there still needed to be some more character development in between the sweet mayhem. Thanks for checking it out!

[spicy_sweets]

Oh! Did you see anything worth changing or expanding on?

[saintc]

Personally, I felt the first five chapters were fastpaced. I'm not sure how all that could be covered just then unless the chapters are really long.

But then again, I've never written horror, and maybe it's meant to be fast paced to keep the reader at the edge of their seat?

[spicy_sweets]

Ahh, yeah. This is my first time writing horror, so I'm also unsure of how pacing normally goes. Thanks for the tip! I know what I'm brushing up on after completion cx

[spicy_sweets]

Ohhh, fixed up the outline btw! https://trello.com/b/cMlk2XUX/cpc