Following the rules of this chain, I read @Christal 's The Merfolk and his Tempestuous Love Story.
Overall, I thought that your vision for this world is very strong! The lore is interesting and the way you've set up the world has a lot of potential! I think my biggest critique is that the story flow is a little discombobulated. There are often breaks in the story to explore the lore or to explain an aspect of the world that takes the reader out of the story. Typically, the best way to marry these two ideas is to incorporate the lore naturally into dialogue or description. Most of the time, readers will be able to cue in that certain things are common occurrence based on how characters react to scenarios. An alternative to that is to have notes at the end of each chapter to explain the lore, but the former typically leads to stronger writing. As I said before, there's a lot of potential with this story, making sure your actual narrative remains uninterrupted and flows well is my advice. Good luck with the rest of your story!
Since the synopsis is on the actual page, I'll give you the elevator pitch:
If you like the dynamics of The Office but you wanted them to have weapons and defeat bad guys then you might enjoy Seven Stars Silver Clouds!
BTW for anyone who reviews this, feel free to tell my why you did or DIDN'T subscribe just cause sometimes there are certain things that turn readers off and either its something i can improve or something I could never fix to begin with lol