Disclaimer: I'm not looking for feedback on the paragraph in here, it's taken out of context you have nothing to refer to regarding it.
That said.... I was having a little chat with one of my beta readers last night and they asked if there really would be a "pop" and I said yes. When they asked how I knew and I answered the best I could, with: "Because there is a dental hygienist in the mid-west who has the scars to prove it. I gave them to her when I was five. It took two people to pry me off of her. "
Sometimes when I come across things in books or short stories I think... really? That can't be true. I find that I'm quite often wrong.
Have any of you had experiences that you've included in your fiction that someone has questioned?
Here's the paragraph from Bright Morn III:
"She chose her moment and sank her little girl baby teeth into his wrist, then squeezed as hard as her jaw would let her. She felt a give in the flesh, then a pop and blood flowed into her mouth, down her chin, neck, and dress. The man screamed, letting go of her with his other arm. She wrapped her arms and legs around him, kicking like her cat did with a rat it captured. He slammed her against the wall to loosen her but she held, continuing to clamp down as the bolts from her father's bowman pierced her captor's throat and eyes."