(Webtoon Edited) Feedback and Help still needed ^^

[b4rdise]

Hello,
how are you?
earlier this month I posted my webtoon asking for help and feedback. I received support and feedback from three artists here (Rosso, fleohr and hanabi9713. Thank you so much again ^^)
I tried to apply their advice and I edited one of the episodes (episode 2)

Anyway, Can you check out my webtoon please and let me know what do you think?
what do you like/dislike about it (story, drawings, etc..)
and feel free to rate it ^^

Barodiso

I still have very few subscribers and the audience engagement is still very low though.
well ^^
any advice is highly appreciated.

Thank you so much!

[kip]

Hi! Best of luck with your new comic, first of all.
You’re still only just beggining to post (just 3 updates.!) so I wouldn’t worry too much about viewership just yet, give people time to discover your comic, and don’t froget to interact with the community & post about it in your social media to get that extra visibility ^^

First thing that bothered me is that i would center the text! It looks a bit odd when it’s left-aligned.

The pacing seems pretty slow to me?
For a scene that could’ve been done in 4 panels you kind of drew it out on the course of like 15. A lot of people prefer quicker paced comics, especially when it’s “relatable comedy” types!

Lastly, the art seems weirdly low quality? As a picture, I mean.
What format are you saving it as? What size canvas are you working on?

Anyway, best of luck!

[fleohr]

You're welcome!

So, besides what kip said:

• The tail of the bubble speech should be pointing at the mouth of the speaker

• I'd avoid using cropped photos of food, some can look weird and maybe hard to see what it is

• Be careful with typos "somwhere", "donnot"

• I also think the bubble speech + font are too big, they take too much space in each panel, making your characters looking tiny

• And adding about the pacing, I know you want to show how much Barodiso loves eating Kimchi, but readers will understand it right away, so you don't need to show how many types of kimchi are there, two or three are more than enough

[fischhead]

I think you're off to a pretty good start! I really liked the first two episodes for the relatable humor. The idea behind each comic is very clear, but like kip and fleohr said, you could tell the same story with fewer panels. The size of the speech bubbles and text only bothered me in the Kimchi episode because the artwork is much smaller than it was in the other 2 comics.