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Mar 2019

Hey all! I've been posting my comic for about two years. I'm well into my second chapter. It's been a ton of fun to write, and work on, but I'd really love some feedback.
If you have a bit of time, I'd love for someone to read what I have so far and let me know your honest opinion.

It would be super awesome of you!

Also, if you do critique it, be sure to post a link to your comic below, and I'll try my best to return the favor!
Thanks,
Jonathan

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Ya sure. Here goes.
Af first I’m surprised that you don’t have more subs than you have. I see this comic as a brilliant one that could be premium. But then again I’m afraid that Adult Swim humor isn’t the main thing here at Tapas.

I see the story, plot, and humor in good balance and you joggle it all very well. I love the way you have the God, Jesus and Devil thing going without me being offended.

The plot is very foreseen but that's okay because the journey is great.

From time to time you drag the dialog and jokes a little like when he runs after the cat too long. Or when Mr. Knight have insurance problems

The art I’m no personal fan of. Either was I that of Rick and Morty but I have seen all seasons twice.
And so I see it with your comic. It is the character, jokes, and story I love.
I have no Idea of how to improve the art. I can only make squares that I copy and call it a comic.

I love that you are here and tribute to the community with other than BL Manga (Nothing wrong with that, but we need other things too)

Keep up the good work and make life awesome.
Here is my comic:

Did this just died???

13 days later

HEY! sorry about the delay. I've been super busy the past few weeks. Trying to get some more comic done and signing up for school, so I hvaen't checked back here in a bit.
I really appreciate the feedback. I always love it when people mention adult swim when they talk about my story. That's the feel Im going for. Rick and Morty is a huge inspiration to me, but I'm not near that good of a writer yet.
I'm glad you mentioned me "dragging" the story. I've come to realize that I do that. I think I picture it as a cartoon instead of a comic, and in a cartoon the pacing would run much faster, and the dialouge would be much quicker. I DO need to work on that.

I hope you are enjoying it over all. I'm excited to get to the next chapters of the story! I hope you enjoy those as well!
And I think I already subscribed to your comic, but I'll give you some feedback as well!

Thanks so much!