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I know my art is not at a professional level I am a beginner & just getting the hang of digital art. I'm creating a comedy for my first comic with a bit of a storyline underneath. I want to know do you guys consider it to be funny & is everything making sense so far. Must of my updates are pretty short & I want to see if the pacing is okay so I want to get other creatives perspective.

Webcomic: https://www.webtoons.com/en/challenge/misadventures-of-the-unheroic/list?title_no=25762619

Thanks to everyone in advance.

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If I click on the link I get the following message: "This webtoon has been deleted or is currently unavailable."

The link is working now, thanks! :slight_smile:
So, I'm not a comic creator (so I can't comment on art and comic-specific stuff) but I'll just leave my thoughts about the rest since nobody else jumped at you yet :smiley:
I've only read the prologue and like the first three episodes so far and I like the Elder. He seems like he'll be fun to have around. Overall, I did think it was funny but I'm not sure where the story is heading. That might also be because of the short updates that you mentioned though and will probably going to be clearer a few episodes further in.

What put me off a bit was the writing. Like, could it be you misspelled "villains" in the prologue? With an extra 'i'? Or did I miss a joke here? And sometimes your punctuation and split sentences seemed weird. E.g. (also in the prologue) you wrote "In this world everybody has a role to play", then there's a bit of blank space and the rest is "and manages to play them very well." Now, I'm not a native English speaker but if you have 'a role' in the first part, then shouldn't it be 'plays it' very well in the second part instead of 'plays them'?
The are a few other things like that which broke immersion for me. That could be a personal thing though but maybe you'd like to check the text again.

I'm just starting out myself (second attempt) so take anything I say with a grain of salt.
First off I'd say don't be so down on your art. It is pretty good in my opinion & the more you do the better you will get. Also totally agree there is learning curve for switching to digital, as I am still in that phase too. My main feedback on art is it might pop more with thicker more solid lines, though everyone has their own style.
Second: Suggest less empty black boxes, not get rid of them but shrink them a bit. Try reading the comic out loud and see how that affects the flow, because in my opinion it creates long pauses that aren't good for dynamic dialogue. It works when you want a pause but otherwise it slows things down. From what I have seen so far this seems to be a common thing for Tapas/ Webtoons but from from someone who is more familiar with web comics outside that format it is something I feel is overdone and doesn't always work. Though it does help when the word bubble is there because then the image and the text each have room to exist.
Third: The words in the cauldron was easily the best joke as it was unexpected and had the bonus joke of the old man not telling what it was.
Hope that helps.

Thanks! I'm gonna go back and look over the text it is sometimes early in the morning when I'm finishing up & the dialogue is the last thing I do before fore publishing. That's why it is so good to have an editor to look over your stuff. I'm a completely newb so I actually use to do my stuff panel by panel and add the black space cause I didnt know how else to do it. Until recently I watched this YouTuber webtoon creator do his comic in long strips then split it to upload it. I tried that option in episode 5 and I think I'm gonna do it that way from now on. Thanks alot once again.

Thanks alot for the feedback I know my art isn't terrible. But I just figured I'd point out it's not as great as it could be before someone else does. I'm okay with where it is right now I think it's good enough to convey my story but I will keep going and improving with it.

Theres alot of black space because before I really did not know what I was doing before & did it panel by panel adding the blank space between to separate panels because I didnt know how else to do it. Recently I was watching a webcomic creator on YouTube who did his comic in a long strip then split it so he can upload it to webtoon. I tried that option on episode 5 & I think I'll stick with it from now on for the story to flow better. Thanks so much for taking the time out to read it glad you found it funny.