Kylano

Kylano

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I subbed, and liked. It's cute.

Thanks a ton for your help, @vanlan. You're the best!

It's better, but it still feels a bit too wordy, and that past perfect tense is getting to me. I feel as if you could change the first phrase to "scarred and shattered by a forgotten war" to get much of the same feel to it, but leave it more active. The second sentence is also a bit much -- I feel l…

Thanks guys. I appreciate your opinions and I feel like it's much better. Always good to get second and third views on things. @Shredder "War never changes" <--- if you can encapsulate the nitty grittiness of this phrase into your blurb somehow, people might empathize with this wounded soldier'…

"Love, happiness, and family: humankind must uphold these three core values lest we be cast away from the light. With my medallion, I have the means to undo the curse that threatens all that exists. We, humankind, are meant to be the saviors of the world. I never knew we could be its destruction, …

Cruel. Not in a directly malicious, antagonistic, or physically abusive way, but just...cruel.

I really hope I have helped! But, you know, you've done much better than my vague thing here: Scripture states that life without love, happiness, and family is for those who walk away from the light and goodness. It is on these three core values that we live and on these three core values that mu…

When a seventeen-year-old girl’s intentions of committing suicide are foiled by a forceful change of plans, she finds herself in the reluctant care of the middle-aged man who had helped to saved her. However, she also quickly finds herself involved with the organization he is a member of—a secret s…

@alexlcuri07 Suri failed to die the first time around, and now this [strange] guy Trenton has to take care of her. After all that, she's now involved in the same organization as Trenton -- a secret society of [ability wielders] separated into Troupes -- when a member targets her. She already …

I read your whole series, and I love Lamida, man. She's a trip. Here's mine if you're interested:

I'm learning that I'm my own best and true fan. No one will love my story as much as I do, and no one will cheer for its success as much as I will. If I lose interest or feel I'm not good enough to write my own story, it's curtains for it. I have to take pride in my abilities, even if no one else do…

If you think that much is fine, then go with it. Never doubt yourself unless pushing yourself ahead is hurting someone else as well. Even then, you have to think of the pros and cons that might go along with that, and whether it's actually worth it to burn all of those bridges.

I don't really see the problem with your opinion on the matter. People don't value your art when it stands alone, so you're forcing them into a situation where they'll notice and hopefully zero in on the aspects you value most. Your way of thinking is hardly any different from a person getting a job…

When my fingers grasped her thin coat, I wasn’t sure who was more surprised by the connection: her, with her round emerald-green eyes, or me, my heart thumping harder than I’d ever thought it could.

I voted last Thursday. Took a mere 5 minutes to get in and out. Fine by me!

Just updated today, actually! 2x/wk update is the goal!

“So I will kill every, last, goddamned [...] bitch out there until there is no blood left to spill. I’ll bathe in their blood and dance upon their corpses, and when they beg for my forgiveness, I’ll slice through their stomachs and hang them with their own fucking intestines. So, it’s a good damned …

I like seeing when people are sincerely hurt. The expressions they make are so pure and rich.

Right?! I'm so glad I'm not alone in this. I'm not a fan of the age of princes/princesses and the exhaustive research involved, or I swear I'd try to write my own version. I mean, what's wrong with falling in love with the "side" character that likes the person for who they are, instead of the "main…

When a character flip flops so rapidly just to make sure (typically) she gets with the main character, who will usually be the prince, or whatever character essentially stalked her, invaded her business, pushed himself into her life "romantically". I find it rare nowadays to have a character, especi…

Wasteland 3! FFVII R! Soon, TOCS IV!

No worries, no Annabelle happening here. What I was referring to is like how people use animals in an anthromorphic manner, where they suddenly talk and display human like expressions/gestures. We know they're cats and that they can't speak as we do. No doubt there. But I've never needed to have suc…

Thank every metaphysical being that I'm not. That just doesn't seem like a good experience in this day and age.

So, it feels more like you treat them like a puppeteer or maybe like pawns on a chessboard, doing whatever you will them at your own behest, right? Like an omniscient overlord (which, I guess we technically are), you put them in the places you feel work best regarding specific situations. It feels…

I have mine here: It's slow going for now, but my characters are still trying to tell me who they are as people.

When I wrote fanfiction once upon a time, it was a bit easier to realize a character wasn't being voiced or written correctly or very well, but I'm finding that when I write up scenarios in my original novel, I can go through an entire half page before I stop dead without knowing why. I can try beat…

[image] My beautiful boy, Vaas. This mofo is crazy af, but he was one of my absolute favorite villains just because it wasn't his fault he was insane. And he made insanity look so, so, SO good.

Are we talking ATLA badly? If so, no way in hell. lol

I gots a novel. It be right hur.