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I'm going to read this when I get home, but just letting you know that I'm interested! [:smug_01:]
Whatever it was, fear burned in her throat as she gripped onto a nearby metal bar. She felt trapped on this ship.
I could honestly go for both formats! Short story authors have skill I don't, making a plot and world in a limited number of words- [:cry_01:]
[image] one can only wonder how much gameplay i actually do of the sims, because posing my MCs doesn't count-
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Hey there! I'm just here to say hi too. Hope you enjoy yourself on this site 
write a chapter every two days until i die 
But seriously, I want to finish The Fragile Poppy by the end of the year.
Here's my own doodle of my main two characters from way back when ^^ [image]
[image] Baby face hours?
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We all could improve! Personally, I read a lot of other stories to help my own. I take note of how characters and settings are described, and even have a list of fun words to use. But the best advice is to develop your own unique style of writing, and I think you're heading there!
You'll have to wait for me to make my AO3 account [:sweat_01:] But my review should be done by tomorrow!
I get this image when I click on your link -- apologies! [image]
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These stories were amazing, first off. You have a mastery with wielding suspense and mystery, and that is essential for these kinds of plots. I'm interested to see if these stories will connect in any way, or if they are completed separated. The first story ended excellently, no spoilers, but it was…
This story seems better to me. I like the description, and the plot is certainly something I could get into. But again, there's this issue of a lack of character. We see this story from Baecrush's perspective, yet I could not tell you a thing about her besides powers. The writing feels disjointed an…
I read the first chapter. This is a book I would not flinch to pick up at a bookstore. I am floored at the imagery, how fast Railynn's character is introduced and the basic nodes of her personality revealed. Though humans vs. magical beings is a tired trope, this is done very well! From the first ch…
I have a strong hatred of the main character being a know-it-all, especially a MC that thinks they're above everyone else. They're usually present in young adult stories. Unless they immediately get knocked down, I'll start resenting them. The other exception would be Light from Death Note. But I do…
There's not much to say about this story yet. I do like the two characters you introduced in the first chapter, and I'm sure I asked myself all the right questions about them. (Why'd she run away? What the heck is that power? Why must he j u m p?) If you wanted your audience to wonder about these th…
Wow, I love your writing style. Already in the first chapter, I'm deeply interested in the plot. The descriptions were beautiful and tied into the story (except with the small infodumps describing each character's appearance, I could do with their looks being introduced more gradually.) You're a ver…
I chose Blade Quest to review, and read 5 chapters of it. I feel as with a description like that, the story should've started right into the action, or at least the finding of this legendary sword. However, I enjoy the gradual worldbuilding you are doing with this introduction. Honestly, I could see…
New creator here 
I am not, which is why I put that I'm a volunteer. I've never worked in the editing industry. I apologize but understand if that disqualifies me from what you're looking for [:sweat_01:]
I write everyday -- but not the same thing. If I get tired of a scene, I move on. But sometimes I have to force myself into a schedule, sit down in a chair and tell my brain, "You write this. Today. Now." To add some (terrible) advice, buy many pretty journals that you'll rarely use 
It'll at leas…
Before anything else, dialogue. I love it. It's perfectly natural and realistic, and is at the same time charming. Your characterization is excellent. Stories with aspects of mental health are hard, and while I only read the first chapter, you are doing a fair enough job. Keep researching anxiety! A…
First off, I enjoy your worldbuilding and descriptions. They are nice and feel natural. I read up until Dragon Approved. I appreciate the story yet I just can't seem to get into it. There's an apparent lack of character and I wish the main character had a more obvious personality. Perhaps it's me, w…
This was just a fun story to read. I love Charlie's characterization, and though we haven't seen much of Max, I'll say the same thing for him. This is an especially humorous zombie apocalypse story, and I've read a few. I can't wait to see more of the action, and am excited for updates from you. I d…
I enjoyed this! Third person omnipresent isn't a common POV, but the way you used it helped to add to the suspense and intrigue of the plot. Your descriptions of settings were very nice, and I'm interested to see where it goes next. What I have to critique is the dialogue. I'm not a huge fan of it b…
I am a native English speaker who has been writing as a passion since middle school. I found Tapas and fell in love with it, so to show some kindness, I'll look over, proofread, and offer criticism for any novelists looking to publish a chapter. Comment below your story, what chapter(s) you would…
Cult of Dionysus is stuck in my head, thanks for reminding me [:sweat_02:]
Any good historical LGBT novels/comics to read?
This is my main character's theme, it's old and in French but give it a listen!
Hope you enjoy ^^