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Aug 2019

Recently, I have posted a story named 'The Beginning Of The Story: Nice To Meet You'..... So I want to get some ideas to improve my story..... Leave your comments down below and let me know! :relieved::relieved:

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Found an issue in the first sentence. You need an editor.

well first thing is first,
have you already decided on what your conflict that will drive your story forward is?

Too many words.
You want the first sentence of your story to hook the readers in, not trudge them along to get them to the good parts. Be concise and cut all the word fat in your novel.
For example,
Your text,
"According to the revolution, some of the people believe that gods exist in our world, but some of the people don't believe in its existence."
should be,
"As accorded by the revolution, some people believe the god exist, but others don't."
Reading further into this story, I realized that there are a lot errors in writing, both in story telling and cadence.
Destroy your work, watch these stories, and start again.

It definitely reads like a first draft. A lot of clunky sentences and grammar missteps... I don't want to be too harsh about a first draft because it's usually not the best way to determine the quality of the writing/writer.

That being said, by posting a first draft riddled with mistakes, it's a good way to lose potential readers. Make sure you have each chapter thoroughly proofread before you start posting.