I'll post it here too
I’ll start with the critique and end with what you did well. For starters, I think you know this already but your beginning chapters are drawn really lightly so it makes it hard to see what’s going on, this in turn also makes it hard to hard to understand the story at times. The speech bubbles as well are not uniform but they don’t have to be unless you want to make it a bit easier on the eyes of readers who are used to circular speech bubbles with the same shape. You could leave it as a style choice, however, the text inside the bubbles is kind of an issue when it comes to reading and understanding your comic. I could tell that your earlier chapters were made a long time ago so you probably have more experience now but the grammar and spelling are important for your comic. You can understand and read the text with context clues but you want readers to be able to view your story without much strain. I’d recommend you go back and darken your drawings/lineart and correct any grammar errors in the early chapters so that you will get more people attracted to your story from the very beginning. If you don’t want to touch your drawings and text bubbles yourself then thats fine as well, you could also hire someone else to edit it for you. I work doing edits for people myself so if you’re considering it then I’m willing to help.
Now for the things that you did were great at. Your storyline is actually amazing! I genuinely enjoyed reading about the mysteries of Acroalis and all the powers and twist and turns of the story. The idea of having the reader decide and make choices is really cool original when it comes to webcomics on this site. You really have something going for you with that idea and it keeps the story fresh and interactive. After each chapter I was very interested to find out what Amali and Hermire would get into next and to know the secrets of ‘neogorus.’ Your lore and world building regarding Amali and her powers was also phenomenal. I think your story is the best thing about your comic besides the wonderful fight scenes. Your characters are very well written and I loved seeing the relationship between Hermire and Amali. Amali’s way of using ‘me’ to call herself was very charming. Also as others said, I can see a HUGE improvement in art from the earlier episodes to the later ones. Your lines became more deliberate and you used contrast to your advantage. Your characters are clearer and the way you work with lighting and perspective/angles is definitely a strong point. Great job! I can also tell the speech bubbles and grammar/spelling became a lot better towards the later episodes. Overall, it is a touching story with realistic character relations and funny characters. It has its own twist of originality and captivating artstyle that is refreshing and unique to see. Your comic has a lot of potential, keep up the good work.