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Hi, I’ve been on this site before back in 2022, and have walked away from writing my story for a bit and just wanted to see how I’d do reviewing works instead for now, comics and novels are allowed. If interested I’m here to talk, thanks​:no_mouth:

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Anything with a story that’s has effort from the creator, it can be a romance, action, comedy or drama/thriller, I be down to read it, comics also sound super fun personally but novels work too.

well I definitely put a lot of effort into my story lol.

So finished your first chapter and am planning second now, just want to say your prose is well developed, I can feel your main heroine’s experience, the flower garden on steroids was funny ngl. Grammar is also good which is a must​:relieved:Your dialogue is pretty witty too, so keep at it, makes reading very immersive! I also figured Kattar was going to crash since they were driving through deep snow, thank goodness he didn’t drink though, all and all I will read next chapter now and do a 5 chapter review since full series will take quite a lot of time.:+1:

five chapters works lol. thank you. I know it's a VERY long story.

Ok chapter 2 and 3 of your amazing novel so far, for chapter 2 your prose is very extraordinary! I felt as if I was in that accident! Sheesh! The part with the endless hum of over-bright, LED electric lights sings in my ear was like eating amazing frosting off a cake when it comes to reading novels! I can tell you’ve got experience! Also chapter 3 with your Interpretation of PTSD is super believable! I truly hope it’s not an actual experience since you are so skilled at describing! I want to read more, I will finish my final review of your series at chapter 4 and 5 stay tuned!

Thank you so much.

this is definitely one of the nicest compliments that I think I've received lol.

Ok, chapter 4 and 5, I can tell our main heroine has been in a very distressing state and is on edge throughout her wait for her boyfriend‘s recovery, I will say the prose in chapter 4 was pretty centered and that I did get lost a little, not to say it was bad, in fact it’s clear on the second read through, as for chapter 5 I’m glad to see things might have worked out hopefully but I won’t spoil too much of your series since we’re are not on a private forum. In any case I had a blast! Great first 5 chapters, I might just subscribe but know I recently just came back on this website. All and great novel with excellent prose, pacing, dialogue and 1st person perspective!

Thank you so much for the review, and I'm glad you liked what you've read. If you don't mind me asking, what do you mean by the fourth chapter being 'pretty centered?' (it'll help me make a note of how I can make sure my writing is clear and understandable for people.)

It’s not too centered I just had to reread it because I still struggle a little with some prose so I didn’t mean anything rude by what I said, all and all great novel you have going on.:pray:

@KeinanX

oh no no no, I wasn't offended. I was legitimately asking so I can improve as a writer XD. Don't worry, i'm not upset or offended in the least. I'm open to commentary even when it's constructive criticism. :grin: Thank you for taking the time to review my story.

I would actually like if LGH got some feedback. I don't really get comments (I got this one weird comment... but it didn't pertain to the story) and I'm not really sure if people like it or not.

I'm sure you'll be drowning in requests, so feel free to take a pass on mine if this premise doesn't suit you:


Several years have passed since the Skylark crashed on Cradle, and the surviving Spiral Knights continue to struggle to find a way back home. Conflict with the native Gremlin colonies has continued to escalate, and after stealing some information from a Gremlin outpost, the members of Wolver Squad are tasked with finding out more information on Project R and what the Gremlin's next attack plan is.

Start with the character bios, pick a chapter at random, or start from the beginning; I'd appreciate any kind of support, even if it's just a comment on something that stood out to you.

If you're still taking requests, I have a finished novel and a short story. Just pick which one seems more interesting to you for a review or which one you have time for (because the novel is slow-burn, so the beginning probably doesn't give you much plot to review) :see_no_evil:

Novel:

Short story:

Hi, thank you for the offer. If you have time, you can review either my comic or novel (or both). Thanks!

If you're not too busy, I wouldn't mind a look.

I have to warn you, it's been 3-4 years since I started it as an art novice...I was struggling for a while but the style has changed alot. Well, you be the judge! Enjoy!

https://tapas.io/series/friar-chicken1