My Critique:
I greatly enjoy the dynamic action of the manga. It really gets your blood pumping though the typical Shounen like structure might throw people off. This isn't a bad thing and its not something I'm going to tell you to fix, I'm just putting that up. We have so many Shounens like these that it might kind of get lost in the crowd.
While I don't think your proportions are too off, I do think just a little bit of practice will help. It may be the personal point that I'm just not used to extremely thick lineart, especially for a manga. Again personal point there.
You've updated a lot in a very short time. As a quick suggestion, ease up. You obviously have a lot done already so I feel its better to post maybe a page or 2 a day and let people get used to those pages first. Plus by posting on such a constantly hourly basis, it might accidentally give off the sense of rushing with no rest. If you've got a lot a pages already finished, that just gives you more time to work on newer ones as you post the upcoming pages.
So yeah, I'd say tone down the uploading a bit. I feel there's no need to update so many pages in just one go like that. Maybe you had a different plan but I don't know.
I'm not sure if you do this, but do you ever put in photograph images in your series, such as backgrounds? If you don't, then no worries but if you do, I wouldn't. I think a series no matter what it is or how good it is, will always look the best when everything is done directly. Sometimes people think that putting in a photo background makes things easier or looks better. IMO, not only does it seem lazy, it takes away from the effort that was shown throughout the rest of the series.
An ironic point here is that I think at times you add in a good amount of detail to your panels, especially with your background, but at times it and especially your characters come off as plain in design. I often feel that your characters are lacking a bit of detail. Try adding a bit more to that, shades, textures, more line work, etc.
That's my suggestions for now, hope they help. Your series really does look quite interesting though and it was fun reading through it.
@Isky
My Critique for "Rich Fiction."
I think the single most prominent thing I can say is, add more details. Simple designs are great for simple comics, maybe a one shot comedy or something. From what I see, you want to create a good story. Add details to, add some textures, line work, tones perhaps. It will definitely liven up your series big time.
Be careful with the text as well. I noticed near the end your text was starting to escape your speech bubbles. This might have just been a slight error since I didn't necessarily notice it before but be careful.
I think a little work can be done on bodies and proportion but honestly, that''s the least of my concerns at this point. I think you should really work on adding more details, really make those pages expand and shine. You have an interesting series that really just needs that additional points to make it stand out.
As usual hope that helps.
@vexnir
I can't say much else but in the same way you might get an audience on DA, do the same here. Talk to people, sub to other comics and like and comment them. Get your name known and be part of the community. Don't worry, a lot of comics only update once a week, some even longer than that.
Plus look at Perfect Dystopia. Only 7 episodes in and you're already nearing the 10 Sub mark. Plus at the same time keep in touch with your readers as well. If a reader posts a comment, reply back. If someone gives you a sub, give them a little thanks in consideration. It's all about being part of the community and being active not only as an artist/writer but as a user itself.
@inbox_anime
I think what I said above works the same here. Get active not only here on the Tapastic community, but possibly elsewhere. It's really just a matter of getting your comic out and being part of the group. Sometimes people might come under the idea that if they just stand there and post, people will flock to them. I had this ideology a while ago too and it just made me realize that I just needed to become more attuned to the community and my readers.
Just as always, hope that helps.
@Mineu
Critique of Tsukiko/Wrd
I'm not really sure what to say on this. While not flawless, in an overall sense I think it seems like a very enjoyable and well done series. I told you earlier about how I think you should keep the speech bubbles pure white and while I'm unsure, you might want to test out different text fonts as well. I brought this up earlier for someone else how sometimes you got to use different fonts for different points.
Otherwise, I really enjoy the colorful nature of your comics. It gives the sense of reading an old time fairy tail book from long ago. In an age where digital art and technology reign supreme, it's nice to see a series that is done in such a completely natural and artistic way. In terms of art, I'm sure there's always something you can improve on but as far as I'm concerned, it looks nice.
As for story, I just say keep it up. Make sure you plan your story and characters as well. Some people like to write by the seat of their pants and almost always that just bites them in the butt and makes the story look rushed. I personally love it when stories and characters develop over time.
I'm not saying this has happened to you but its just an overall warning and it goes for everyone. Don't take what I call the "Bleach Effect" which was a long running Shounen manga by Tite Kubo that recently finished a bit ago. While his series started off quite well at first, it became apparently how quickly he was writing by the seat of his pants. Characters, characterization, story plots, development all of it was either rushed or non-existent. And it finally got to the point that the series just kind of ended on a huge Deus Ex Machina and now a days, it's almost universally panned for just how low it fell since then.
There you go, this wasn't much of a critique so if anyone wants to add more to that, go a head.
I hopefully got to everyone, if not I apologize and just send a quick message my way.
@Zannen00
I'll hopefully get to your review/critique on my next little review postings.
