BL Reviews for You! (First 4 get reviews)!

[Aleksei]

Thank you very much!
As you may have guessed, english is not my first tongue, so here and there will be problems. I can't avoid it u_u
I am still learning about a lot of things, so your insights helps me to understand where I should put my eye! I don't think that I would do a beta testing, though, because I am doing this for fun and to learn about drawing and comic in general, but believe me that I will address as much as I can in every new chapter I make =D

Thanks!

[CandyDaisies]

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[candiedcotton]

All good, I was reading yours and some others here as well. It's nice being able to pick up more things to read.

Thanks for taking the time to look it over, and I appreciate the feedback quite a lot. It's kind of a world where the power is split between government and the 'church', two mega structures with very little overhead control. There's a lot of corruption that gets shown over time but I don't want to offer too much.

You absolutely should question Benji immediately shooting the guy, so that's a good thing. He's supposed to come off to the reader as someone who's a little sociopathic, with a weird focus on Katai that gets sort of broken down over time as well. It's definitely a weird thing to work with but I really wanted to build on complex psychology that's been impacted by a lot of trauma.

Katai has PTSD and he has unusual reaction to extreme situations. One of the hallmarks of PTSD is having either overreaction or underreaction to stress-inducing events. Instead of 'flight or fight' kicking in he either tries to rationalize what cannot be rationalized, or goes into a sort of shutdown, "let it happen" mode.

Of course, these are all things the reader ought to pick up without anyone telling them, so if that doesn't start to show I would need to work on elements to make it show itself better. But that's the importance of feedback and why these discussions are so incredibly helpful, so I really appreciate it (and you can be blunt with me, I'm very used to and open to critique, haha).

In the end, I wanted characters with real problems, who's personalities are shaped by their life experiences and who are able to heal and grow meaningfully. People who are damaged, imperfect, and who make mistakes. I initially had some really negative feedback (someone told me Benji came off as a rapist, and that really struck a chord) so I'm hoping as the story progresses it's showing they aren't superficial.

Anyway, thank you for your time, and everyone else here. I'm reading through all the things being posted but I tend to really take my time absorbing material and I'm not so good at giving critique to people, lol.

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[ivanskilling]

@Aleksei Thank you so much for your review! Episode I.2 is actually a continuation of the very first chapter, so he's wearing a normal shirt and tie. I purposely didn't mention which part of the world this takes place in because the story is supposed to give off an international vibe and focus on relationships without the distraction of settings, cultural norms, and biases. I do understand though that this may confuse some readers.

And thank you for bringing up the good point about the descriptions of the CEO and CTO! I forgot to mention that this is from Junming's viewpoint and not an actual "fact" per se. I'll edit the episode later tonight to mention that. (I had a really good laugh about your impressions of the CEO and CTO though since they couldn't be more wrong! We'll see later that the CTO is a very kind man at heart who believes in what they're doing and is loyal to a fault. And the CEO is actually a really motivated man who puts a lot of his ideas into action.)

@AKG Thank you very much for the review! The two male leads have a very disastrous first impression of each other on Junming's first day at work, so it'll be fun to see how they evolve together.

Ah yes, the classic show-don't-tell! Thank you for catching that! Due to the abnormal amount of times that Junming blushes (for comical reasons), I do try to avoid mentioning his cheeks all the time and jazz it up with different variations. But I do like that second sentence of yours! If you don't mind, I'll edit the episode to include that.
And thank you! I'm excited for the 51st chapter as well since I'm launching more merchandise!

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[ivanskilling]

Thank you! I've been slowly releasing merchandise for my other novels over the past few months but this will be the second release of merchandise for this latest novel!

[Aleksei]

Hi! Thank you very much for the review!
I loved your comic! I laughed with the name of the city. No superheroes -because its not Gotham-, but we are clear that there is a lot of crime around the city just with one gag. Very well done! I had almost the same problem than @AKG about the killing cop, but not because the happy trigger or the reaction of Katai, but because it was in broad daylight, a central street, and there was abolutely no witness around. I don't know if the guy that he had detained before also will be important or not in the story, or a case that he was working, but my sugestion for that kind of thing is, if you don't gonna use it, you don't show it. If it was to show that Benji is a wild beast, it's pretty clear as how he treated Katai in the first pages. My biggest concern with the scene, though is that if he was in another case, it was just pure luck that he meet with Katai, but later he made it sound like he was searching for him because he feared that someone might harm him, so why loose time with another dude, and how did he knew that Katai was running in that street when he didn't knew the city and got off the train in a random stop to escape the hitman. Because the magic of comics? If you solved this already, don't hear me. If it bring to you attention a detail that you have not thought about, take it into the consideration for futures scenes~

[Aleksei]

I understand what you mean about not mentioning the place of the world. I did the same in my comic, but I have the advantage to show constructions and clothing to close the gap of placement from early in the comic, you have not that privilege, so give it a thought, just to gave a sense of placement for the character, not necessarily to hyperfocus on this either. The pictures of the CEO and CTO gives a feeling of the time, so you already have something working on that direction.
I find pretty interesting that my opinion were so off in the CEO and CTO! Interesting in a good way! You can throw off people with only the pictures and later show how they really are, creating a nice contrast, so good for you! Keep up the good work!

[ccmatta]

First of all, thank you so much for liking my work and subscribing

Yeah, backgrounds are the death of me, in the current chapters I'm drawing I'm trying to draw them more and more to improve that. And I'll take a look at gesture drawing! thanks for the tip!
Humm, I see... Yeah, my fear was that the pace was too quick indeed. I undestand, thanks. I'll take that in consideration for the future! Actualy my fear is that I make things to happen too much or too little, I may have no balance here xD but I'll try to pay attention to that.

[ivanskilling]

Sure, I'll give it a thought!

Lol yes indeed. And thank you so much!

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