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Jun 2019

It could help if you said what kind of feedback you are looking for.

I do like the overall color scheme, and I think you have a cute style that you can grow into. There are a few small things you can do to clean up your comic that will make a big impact. For example in your first panel the coloring from the computer overlaps the speech bubble, and since the speech bubble doesn't have an opaque background your text also overlaps the computer. This makes it look messy and rushed.

I like that you are experimenting with line weight, and over time these transitions will get cleaner/smoother.

Another nickpit - but it would probably be better to say " I'm nearly done with housestick" or I'm nearly finished with housesick" The way you currently have it worded is confusing.

Also having the icons close to/ kissing the edge looks messy. Making the chat slightly smaller and moving it in frame will help the comic look cleaner.

Speech bubble placement and shape is equally as important as your characters when it comes to the composition. I would also watch - make sure that the tail attaches cleanly to the bubble. See below:

You should always try and center the text and try and format it for the best readability. A better way to format the text would be:

What Is
this
Outside?

Try to not hyphenate the text whenever possible!

Thank you for for reply I will make sure that the 4 to 5 pages of Larry is improved one