Okay so...
First off, visually, it's just one HUGE paragraph-- or it looks like it, at least. I suggest you break it down into smaller paragraphs so that your story flows better and isn't too daunting for the audience to read.
Second, your sentences sound very choppy(?) and there's no flow that really connects them together. I suggest you go back, re-read what you wrote and try to see how you can connect your ideas together for a better flow of the story.
And, like the others have said in this thread, it seems like you're just dumping everything out instead of world-building. I suggest you try to incorporate your character(s)'s (or narrator) perspective on the situation-- something that will give the reader a better idea of what you're trying to convey, rather than just dumping all the information onto the audience.
One tip/ suggestion: outline the general direction of your story. It'll help you plan out what you want to happen without feeling overwhelmed with getting down all the details! Good luck~