Let me just say, this is incredibly well produced!! The art is lovely and the story set up is super interesting from the get-go! It's high quality for a non-professional work, so you should def be proud of this!
Some very big positives is that your pacing/dialogue feels very natural! I enjoy how you slowly let readers in on the universe and the characters without spelling it all out at once. The variation in the camera angles/composition are also really strong and do a lot to impact the emotions in each scene.
I think my only critique(and its a SUPER nitpicky thing) is that the rendering of the art looks like it could use a little more love? Your style and understanding of anatomy/technique is already really strong, so comparing all the great things regarding those to the shading/rendering that looks a little mediocre really sticks out. I think maybe if you incorporate a blend of hard light/soft shading it would maybe help? But that's just my opinion lol. I really encourage you to play around with the rendering technique to really bring the art to the next level!
As I said before, this is incredibly well produced and you should be proud! I'm subscribed and excited to see more of the story :)) If you want me to take a deeper look into anything else, feel free to message me and ask!
If you want, you can look through my webcomic and give your own feedback? The arts a little all over the place in the beginning and it starts a little slow, but I hope you can enjoy it nonetheless!
