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Apr 2017

Howdy, I just finished my prologue for Infected Blood and I'm looking for feedback:

https://tapastic.com/series/Infected-Blood23

It's only 5 pages long. Here's what I'd like to hear about (feel free to answer as many or as few questions as you like): is it powerful? Is it clear? Does it make you curious about the rest of the story? What's working and what's not? And what about the colors (these are pretty much the first pages I've ever made in color!), do you think they fit the mood? Anything else you'd like to point out?

Thanks for any and all feedback!

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I haven't read the summary on purpose, since you're asking for review on the prologue only.

It doesn't really strike me as "powerful", as in emotional etc, purely because there's very standard adventure dialogue (I.E 'hold on' or ' just go!') and just a couple of shots of different characters who I don't know and therefore do not care about. It's all very abstract, which I think was your point, but there wasn't really anything unique about it, just a run-of-the-mill start to sci-fi(?) adventure. I had trouble figuring out what was happening (I still don't get it. Egyptian aliens is the only thing I gained from it? ) because of the confusing paneling & camera angles. It's good that you're going for different angles & perspective shots but I felt like with such a short prologue they just made it more confusing. The mood is dark & gritty so I think you did a good job on that. The colours are very standard western comic colours(--flat), so there's not that much to say about them. Some of the backgrounds had weird colour gradients that were just ugly colour combinations to me, but that's more a personal preference.

The anatomy is more or less okay except in the hands and faces. IMHO you should practice those more, since they stick out consistently when compared to the rest. The expressions are also off, especially the latest torso & up shot of the main character(?), in the same manner that ME: Andromeda facial animations are off. I can't honestly tell where you were going with that particular expression, I'm guessing either 'sexy' or 'hurt' but it kind of looks like she's singing more than anything. Try to google references, or just go pull faces in front of a mirror to help out with making the expressions more real.

Thanks a lot, that was very helpful! I mostly welcome the point of view of people like you, who didn't read my previous comic, so don't know anything about the main character who's hurting herself (with off anatomy :)). No aliens, just a parallel universe where Ancient Egyptian culture has had much more influence that in our world. Different camera angles are on the confusing side on purpose, but due to spoilers I can't explain more. I'll keep practicing anatomy and coloring - I know, my weakest points.

Cheers!

I didn't read anything of it, because a good prologue should stand on its own without needing the creators input for context, and this way my review would be the most of use. Also, you can't expect your readers, seeing that you treat this project as a stand-alone and not a sequel, to go read through your other works for context. And I'm not talking about the angles being confusing for not figuring out what was happening (since that was obviously intentional), but I mean in that I have no clue where anyone is supposed to be in the space of the enviroment because of the angles and sometimes wonky perspective.

Hope this cleared any misunderstanding you had.