My biggest criticism for your story is your writing itself.
There are a lot of grammatical errors- almost one per sentence even. It's distracting, and takes me out of your story. Not only that, but when I see grammatical errors like that I think, "how much care and effort could the author even have put into this story if they didn't even bother to proofread?" Like the art in a comic, your writing style is the first thing someone reading your comic is going to notice, so take the time to polish it.
Secondly, it's very confusing. I often interpreted sentences wrong or had no idea what what going on. This is partially due to the writing style and grammatical mistakes, but it also feels like you're assuming the audience knows more than they do.
You have to remember that while you know your world and characters well, your readers know nothing, so you have to introduce things to them clearly and slowly. Confusing people doesn't make them interested, it makes them bored. People don't remember what they don't understand. For example, who is "you" in the story? Is it me, the reader? That's what I thought it was, but then you dropped a "he" into a sentence, and wait, there's been another character here the whole time? And was the narrator talking to me, or to the prisoner? Are there three characters in the room, or two? The change in perspective is very jarring.
The good thing about your story is that the writing gets a lot better on page three. And the story, too, because you begin to actually introduce the characters. While pages one and two feel like shocking imagery for no reason, page 3 introduces an interesting premise: a kidnapping victim and captor with a cordial relationship. That's intriguing, while random blood and gore isn't. The reader has to care about the characters before they care about the action and violence, and it kind of seems like you're doing things out of order.
In my opinion, you should reread everything and fix the grammatical errors and wording to make things more clear. Get a proofreader if you can, someone you trust to give you actual criticism and not just lazily say it's fine. Also, start the story with page 3 and move the violent imagery on page 1 and 2 to later, after the audience gets to know your characters a bit. Ease them into it.
But that's just my two cents. I hope my rambling were a little bit helpful, but at the end of the day we're all just doing this for fun so do what feels right to you.
P.S.
it's = it is
its= belonging to it
they're= they are
their= belonging to them
there= in that location