I looked at the page that you linked to... so far I think the composition needs improvement, for instance, the first episode with the dark haired girl holding the tablet, since that was an inset panel, it looked awkward, just make inset panels there own panels. Another thing that would have helped get the message across that the girl was holding the map would be to show her fingers on the tablet.
And word balloons should always have tails that point to the characters mouth they are coming from. Try to avoid offscreen word bubbles. I would hazard to guess that at this stage of that game, if you have an offscreen word balloon coming up, go ahead and redraw the panel to have the word balloon on the same panel as the person it comes from.
After that, I do think you've got some good energy going, love the way you draw the girls and their expressions 
