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May 2020

I have just finished my first chapter of a serialized work hooray! I've never gotten this far before so it's a big accomplishment for me. This chapter is mostly and introduction chapter just showing off the characters and such. Next chapter plans to be focused on more interesting things.

When you give your critique if I can just ask you to also tell me something you did like about my story? I take criticism very harshly and it get's me down but I also know that it's important to a story. I want to know what I am doing right as much as what I am doing wrong!
Okay enjoy the story! There are 6 episodes so far and I am currently working on chapter 2!

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The art style is very nice, the flow of the pages is generally good, i just think the speech bubles are taking too much space and some times the pages can feel a little bit crowded with dialogue, i think that is all i have to say. over all the work is pretty good.

I was worried about that to be honest. I wanted to make sure they were big enough to be easily legible but maybe they're too big. Do you know any problem pages specifically? Are there any pages where it had a good amount of speech bubbles at a nice size?

I would have to take another look to be tell witch ones are, but i think generally is not a big problem, only when theres a lot of dialogue in the page that starts to feel crowded.
a way to fix that woul be either make the words smaller or put less speach bubles per page.

if you want to prioritizes consistence with your previous pages, i think the second option would be the best but if you want to keep the amount of words the same them the first one would be the best. or try to find a mid term.

upon another look i think the best size for a speech buble would be the one from the (its nothing) and (you're lovely) at the last page you published, try to see what font size would be possible to fit in a similar space, but also while also still be readable.
the font size from(oh yeah i remember) seems to be a good fit. i can read it and dosent take to much space.

Thank you very much! I am going to keep this in mind while making chapter 2!