Critiquing First Chapters! A hit or a miss?

AanchalBudhiraja 2021-02-27 10:30:56 UTC #38

@Lemon_Demon @noenoh @CytricAcid Hi guys! I'll start the critiques with those who have read Darkly Ever After first Please ping on the forum if you're done reading, and I'll surely start on yours!

@AnimeKitty @rajillustration Thanks for your amazing reviews and feedback. Really appreciated. I'm starting on your critiques now!

AanchalBudhiraja 2021-02-27 10:34:39 UTC #39

@rajillustration Thank you for leaving the feedback! You totally caught my own hesitations about posting such a heavy first chapter. While I don't want to justify posting it, it would have ended up as a backstory or the prologue (which can be off putting for readers.) The real story should pick up from episode 3. I would love to hear any advice you have on fixing it! Thanks!

AanchalBudhiraja 2021-02-27 10:56:13 UTC #40

Hi Rachel! I read the all the prologue parts of ABOTN. It's absolutely hilarious! Loved all the classy build up to his thesis and indeed what a thesis it was! Your writing is fast and pacy and each chapter was like a sweet fun delight.

Although Harriet is only introduced in the 1st chapter, I think you did a wonderful job in setting tone for the story. And using the same opening lines for Abbot and Harriet was a great little touch! There's nothing much to critique. Best of luck with your story!

WinterFall 2021-02-27 11:22:00 UTC #41

Hello there! Thank you for this thread. I just read the first chapter and the short introduction or prologue you added into your story Darkly Ever After, and all I have to say is... wow. Your first chapter was heavy and deep, in a good way though. The way you set the tone for your story was amazing, in my opinion. Honestly speaking, I was really hooked in already! Your setting was also very descriptive, and that's quite nice. I think it's a story that would hook in a lot of readers very soon. I was really intrigued, so I left likes for you! Anyway, here's my novel! I'd appreciate any critique you can give me. It would be very helpful. Thank you!

noenoh 2021-02-27 15:48:33 UTC #42

Agshdjejdieksk thank you (I knew I was forgetting something) finally is weekend and can read it!

Edit: I got hooked immediately to the story with the introduction at first because Tamara and later becasue you could describe these situations with a raw feeling (I felt like I was witnessing that scene) and got focussed on Tamara's mom cause I met similar people like them and I couldnt but feel so frustrated as Tamara in that momment. I want to know more now! Subscribed!

rajillustration 2021-02-27 17:37:43 UTC #43

honestly it's a good chapter, and I don't know enough about the story to say if it needs to have a chapter before introducing and leading up to that (because I'm assuming that this chapter is super plot important, so it probably needs to be there) It was just that there was no mention of surviving abuse in the blurb/prologue episode so it caught me off guard? Maybe having a little tiny hint in the blurb so people know what to expect?

I'm not sure what I would do, honestly, since I have only seen the two episodes.

rajillustration 2021-02-27 17:40:11 UTC #44

Aw and thank so much for spending the time to critique my story! Best of luck with yours as well!

Johnny 2021-02-27 17:43:44 UTC #45

I would really love feedback! It's the introduction chapter! Please leave your feedback on the forum!

Lunar-Turtle 2021-02-27 18:33:46 UTC #46

I would love some feedback, thank you for doing this

You can put the critique here on forums

HopefulAttempt 2021-02-27 23:30:42 UTC #47

Thank you so much! I'll definitely be sure to go back over it! I just read your first chapter, and it's really intense, and does a great job hooking the reader! I wish you the best luck with your series! Thank you again!

aslansniece 2021-02-27 23:42:42 UTC #48

I would appreciate any constructive criticism you might be able to give me too - I'm always looking to improve

Lemon_Demon 2021-03-01 03:17:20 UTC #49

omfg your story is lit! I even commented, idk if you can see that yet.
Can’t wait for the next chapter. Pacing is pretty good, descriptions in the right amount, and yeah its pretty good for now.

strawbisci 2021-03-01 04:15:39 UTC #50

heres my comic! the first 3 are meant to be read as one but id be happy with you just reading the first too, id like the crit on the forum please!

CyberAxl 2021-03-01 15:48:57 UTC #51

Just finished my first chapter! Would love to hear your feedback

jcmraz 2021-03-01 16:23:36 UTC #52

Always interested to see what people think and how I can improve

thecrystalrook 2021-03-01 18:21:04 UTC #53

Hi! My first chapter came out almost 2 years ago but why not see what new readers think, right? The artwork isn't great in the first, so this should be a good test of the story

AanchalBudhiraja 2021-03-05 16:37:06 UTC #54

@Lemon_Demon @noenoh Done with your critiques! Sorry for the wait, I'd a busy office week!

noenoh 2021-03-05 17:20:08 UTC #55

Thank you so much for the review! And thanks for taking the time to do this. Much appreciated 🏻

ringowatanabemanga 2021-03-05 20:18:09 UTC #56

please let me know what you think! thank you https://tapas.io/series/Dragon-Tofu/info

techstylesstudio 2021-03-05 20:53:23 UTC #57

Well the first three episodes are the first chapter of my comic, so give it a read and let me know what you think of it. Feedback does help a lot, thanks.